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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
T_T nnnoooooooooooooooooo~~~~ *sniff* Well anyways! Awesome once again! Please update soon. (So many possibiltieeeeeesssssssssssssssssssssss)
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
-giggles like a virgin school girl and blushes just as bright- My, my ... I am at a lose for what to say. I loved every moment of it. And my favorite part was when Shawn said something about what he wanted would be within the region of his wallet. My mind went fully to Wallet= Pants= butt= A very deliciously excited Shawn! ^_^ I blushed I do not know how many times while reading this. I also made little happy sqealing nosies that made my older sister look at me funny and comment on how much of a 'Pansy' I really am. Thank you for replying to my review. I think you are the most brilliant woman to have thought of commenting back to the ones who take the time to review for you. ^_^ A true woman with a beautiful heart and wonderfully smut-dipped mind ^_^ Good enough to eat, in my opinion. -blushes with a smile- Uri for a day ... I wonder what Shawn means by that? I wouldn't mind being Shawns for an entire day -drools and licks lips- Oh! Ohm ... forgive me for making this review short, but duty calls! I look forward to another great chapter from you, you brighten up my day whenever I see that you have updated. ^_^
Dayakara~
Dayakara~
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Aww Shawn is so sweet just wanting One Day from Uri for his birthday... And OMG is Dan another person whose been crushing on Uri... now that his out in the open... well except to Shawn the most important person I wonder how many ppl are secretly pining for him. I wonder if Shawn will ever find out about all the things that are happening at Uris school... And the waving thing is so cute. Its gonna break Rane's heart when Uri chooses Shawn in the end.
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"I want you for one day …"
It breaks my heart... *snif* Only for one day?...
*smirks*
It breaks my heart... *snif* Only for one day?...
*smirks*
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
what can i say...
i fell in love with your story after reading the first chapter ^^' seriously. your narration is really great. it sucks a reader in, is fluent and so full of humor ^^
that was what made me love your writing first. then i got sucked in by the plot... it's so realistic. all the feelings inside uri, the contradictions, the "wants" and "can'ts", the guilty conscience and despair. and all the "almosts" ^^' it's so obvious for us readers that they both love each other but uri really is a bit slow on the uptake, lol ^^ but i guess that's one of the things that make him so cute :]
actually i was introduced to your story by trix last wednesday. and... i ended up staying up till 5am, reading as much as my eyes allowed me! in the morning i printed the remaining 9 chapters (i used up almost all remaining ink for that ^^") and read it between lectures and in a bus (ah, one good side of commuting). i guess that's the best proof of me loving this story of yours, huh? ^^' and just now i noticed the "review" button, huh... ^^' well, i only wanted to tell you that i really love this story and that i'll be waiting for continuation ^^ and that you're evil with the cliffhangers XD i know that it's only my second one, but it still hurts XD
and i have to... "praise" you? in a little less than 6 months you wrote 23 chapters, long ones. that's something to be proud of. you're not only a talented writer but a creative and hardworking one ^^
i'm teally really glad that i got to read this story ^^
you have a fan in me ^^
on a side note, i feel a little sad for rune. he seems to be a nice guy but it's obvious he'll be dumped as soon as uri and shawn realize each other's feelings...
just one thing can't leave me alone. rune mentioned some old "debt" to uri... could it be that he was one of the jocks that beat uri up in the previous school? uri never seemed to pick that revelation up...
plus rune's perceptivness makes him kinda scary ^^' if anyone was to notice uri's feeling towards his brother rune will be the first one. he may be even faster than shawn O_o
is shawn actually noticing his brother's internal struggle? i'm not sure... on the one hand he's obviously making a pass on uri, something a brother wouldn't usually do if not expecting to succeed, on the other hand he's not actually making his passes clear enough... is he probing uri? suspecting but not being sure that his little brother feels the same as he? we only know what uri thinks so these are all guesses...
lol, or maybe he has no idea (is he a s slow as uri? ^^) and is trying to make uri fall for him? ^^
well, one thing makes me especially wonder... when they finally realise their feeling, declare/make/swear love to each other... will they ever tell their parent what's between them? it's one thing being gay and quite another being gay for your brother. the parents, as understanding and loving as they are, might not be able to accept it.
oh, another thing. does their parents know that shawn is gay? they always behave weird when shawn's love life is mentioned... and are they suspecting uri to be one too? his mom is very curious about rune and even tough she turned shawn's revelation into a joke she might've believed it... maybe she doesn't want to make it hard on uri?
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um... is my review a tad long? ^^;
just know that i love it and am all curious as what will happen next ^____^
thank you for writing such a great story :]
kashka
i fell in love with your story after reading the first chapter ^^' seriously. your narration is really great. it sucks a reader in, is fluent and so full of humor ^^
that was what made me love your writing first. then i got sucked in by the plot... it's so realistic. all the feelings inside uri, the contradictions, the "wants" and "can'ts", the guilty conscience and despair. and all the "almosts" ^^' it's so obvious for us readers that they both love each other but uri really is a bit slow on the uptake, lol ^^ but i guess that's one of the things that make him so cute :]
actually i was introduced to your story by trix last wednesday. and... i ended up staying up till 5am, reading as much as my eyes allowed me! in the morning i printed the remaining 9 chapters (i used up almost all remaining ink for that ^^") and read it between lectures and in a bus (ah, one good side of commuting). i guess that's the best proof of me loving this story of yours, huh? ^^' and just now i noticed the "review" button, huh... ^^' well, i only wanted to tell you that i really love this story and that i'll be waiting for continuation ^^ and that you're evil with the cliffhangers XD i know that it's only my second one, but it still hurts XD
and i have to... "praise" you? in a little less than 6 months you wrote 23 chapters, long ones. that's something to be proud of. you're not only a talented writer but a creative and hardworking one ^^
i'm teally really glad that i got to read this story ^^
you have a fan in me ^^
on a side note, i feel a little sad for rune. he seems to be a nice guy but it's obvious he'll be dumped as soon as uri and shawn realize each other's feelings...
just one thing can't leave me alone. rune mentioned some old "debt" to uri... could it be that he was one of the jocks that beat uri up in the previous school? uri never seemed to pick that revelation up...
plus rune's perceptivness makes him kinda scary ^^' if anyone was to notice uri's feeling towards his brother rune will be the first one. he may be even faster than shawn O_o
is shawn actually noticing his brother's internal struggle? i'm not sure... on the one hand he's obviously making a pass on uri, something a brother wouldn't usually do if not expecting to succeed, on the other hand he's not actually making his passes clear enough... is he probing uri? suspecting but not being sure that his little brother feels the same as he? we only know what uri thinks so these are all guesses...
lol, or maybe he has no idea (is he a s slow as uri? ^^) and is trying to make uri fall for him? ^^
well, one thing makes me especially wonder... when they finally realise their feeling, declare/make/swear love to each other... will they ever tell their parent what's between them? it's one thing being gay and quite another being gay for your brother. the parents, as understanding and loving as they are, might not be able to accept it.
oh, another thing. does their parents know that shawn is gay? they always behave weird when shawn's love life is mentioned... and are they suspecting uri to be one too? his mom is very curious about rune and even tough she turned shawn's revelation into a joke she might've believed it... maybe she doesn't want to make it hard on uri?
...
um... is my review a tad long? ^^;
just know that i love it and am all curious as what will happen next ^____^
thank you for writing such a great story :]
kashka
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
^______^ Just brilliant, as usual. Greetings to your muse!
Honestly though, I thought I was going to be a little... sad if nothing "happened" in this chapter. But when I read it I didn't care much. I loved the kitchen scene with the food, and the tv scene! It's nice to see Uri and Shawn having a relaxing, normal time. I really like the way you balance the cute (or hot??? *grin*) and "normal" moments. That's what makes a good story line. Everytime I try to write something I tend to focus too much on the couple and leave all other aspects out, which is bad...
You're great, I love your work!
Oh, and the simple wording of Shawn's brithday wish was one of the best sentences in the story so far!
Honestly though, I thought I was going to be a little... sad if nothing "happened" in this chapter. But when I read it I didn't care much. I loved the kitchen scene with the food, and the tv scene! It's nice to see Uri and Shawn having a relaxing, normal time. I really like the way you balance the cute (or hot??? *grin*) and "normal" moments. That's what makes a good story line. Everytime I try to write something I tend to focus too much on the couple and leave all other aspects out, which is bad...
You're great, I love your work!
Oh, and the simple wording of Shawn's brithday wish was one of the best sentences in the story so far!
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that was brilliant i cant wait to see what shawn has in mind... I still think that Rane actually likes Uri and he's really interested in him, the last chapter kinda confirmed it in my mind
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Teeta, these cliffhangers are wrong but it makes me read on. "I want you for one day." I bet Uri was like what? I know I am. I had to read that line three times to know what Shawn meant. I wonder what Shawn want from Uri for one day. Something tells me it is going to be something naughty. Anyway, great chapter and please update soon.
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love it when Shawn chokes when Uri licks his finger!!! Loved IT!! Great Update and I hope Uri gives Shawn that day he wants and more, lots more! The LOTR pairing is Elladan/Legolas/Elrohir and Legolas/Elladan. Two different stories. Melethen and then Sleeping With the Enemy. I love those pairings and Elladan/Elrohir of course. Almost nothing beats twincest..I did say almost, dear. Shawn and Uri are giving my LOTR cravings a run for their money. You are telling an excellent story!
*hugs*
Meleth
*hugs*
Meleth
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April 28, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh how happy it made me to see this updated after I came home from a fabulous shopping trip. What a good day! I must say though, you are a cruel cruel author...dragging things on like this. *bounces off to wait* Well, hopefully you'll get the next bit out soon. In the meantime, the side story was good too ^_^ Didn't get around to reviewing it there, so I'm saying it here.