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Another cliffie...I hope Shawn has a big surprise for him and they are later than 6!!! It's time to get these boys together, I hope. Great chapter, Hon.

Meleth

hmm... i come from reading this chapter with the image of Uri sucking on a condom on Shawns fingers... hmm, i have no idea how my mind jumped there :P
and now let me say HOT! SQUEE!! and BLOODY HELL!
you have simply got to update ASAP!! i cant wait for the art project!! and this "surpise"
man, shawn has GOT to know what he is doing to poor uri, he simply has to.
this slave for a day is so exciting!
...oooh, i wonder if they will run into rane when out shopping, that could be fun :D
argh you see what this story does to me!? i already check daily to see if you've updated... and squeel from excitment when i see you have, earning me some odd looks.

and ROFL!!! tartar sauce on teh condom!! shawn must have been thinking about that one for a while!! and the scubbers!! hahahaha! fun!!
anyway, im going to shut up now, great chap, please please please for the sake of my sanity update really really soon.

aHHHHHHHH!!!im obsessed with this fic!i luv it!i really hope shawn draws the picture of uri somewhat nude!!xD just a wish!<3

I believe there was a lot of pressure for more Shawn/Uri fluff moments. I liked the condom conversation. Weird but funny. And I really wonder if Shawn is going to convince Uri to get his picture drawn naked… Shawn’s definitely being more forward alright. But even so, Uri won’t have a clue before Shawn grabs and ravishes him. And even then he would probably think Shawn did it by accident, lol.

Uri: OMG!! Shawn what are you doing? Why are you touching me there? Shawn!
Shawn: I took a drug that makes me hallucinate… I … um … thought you were that girl that I like. Sorry I ravished you.
Uri: … oh …. Ok

But honestly, I wouldn’t want Shawn to be too blunt al of a sudden. I’d like him more as the mad stalker, following his brother when he’s dating the red headed Jock as in your little piece of journal. That’d be totally crazy. I mean, you made it pretty obvious you are going to end this story with Shawn and Uri being a happy couple, and I know there’s a gang of needy fangirls breathing down your neck demanding instant Shawn/Uri smut, but… you know I ‘m a fan of angst. And I’m also a huge fan of Rane. So I want Rane to have Uri first and I want Shawn to suffer and tear himself apart before he can have his little brother. I want Shawn to find that videotape from my last review and go insane with foam on his lips, like; “That BLOW JOB was supposed to be MINE!!!” Hehe.

….

*runs away from angry mob of Shawn fangirls*

Ps: Yes my manipulative redhead outmanoeuvred me into marrying him. As of now I’m a wedded girl. Lol. I hope that doesn’t sound too scary. Rest assured he won’t get in the way of my writing. ^^

I have to tell you I just had a fun idea. Perhaps the situation can come to the point where Uri is dating both Rane and Shawn, afraid to break up with either and unable to make up his mind….

That could lead to a spectacular confrontation between the two rivals. SHAWN VS. RANE. I can totally see this happen in a ‘beat ‘em up’ arcade game like tekken or soulcalibur and such. Imagine cartoon Shawn and cartoon Rane taking swings at each other. Fuck that’s hilarious! It’s brilliant! LMAO! I WANT THAT GAME!! Oh and as background song: Torn between two lovers, feeling like a fool. Loving both of you is breaking all the rules… I don’t know how it goes on or who sings it. A guy made me sing it karaoke once when he wanted me to chose between him and his cousin. =P

Now seriously. It seems like everyone wants you to go somewhere else with this story so I can hardly be mad at you if the story doesn’t happen the way I’d like it. (Besides I already know it won’t.) You can’t please everyone and that’s fine. I hate reviewers that scold me because not everything goes the way they wanted it. But if you’re interested, here’s what I would like to happen:
If you go in the direction I would LOVE this story to go, Rane and Uri will be together and Shawn will go insane with jealousy. But then things could turn around after a while when Uri sees Shawn with another cute boy, and become insanely jealous himself. Then when he finally sees Shawn is actually gay as well, things may finally start to dawn on him that Shawn really loves him in the same way he does. All of a sudden everything that happened between them will be replayed in front of Uri’s eyes and he will realise he’s been totally blind. Imagine that: Uri finally gets a clue! And if everything goes the way I’d want to, Uri will take the first step and open Shawn’s eyes, making clear that Shawn is really the person he wants by suddenly kissing him in a completely unexpected moment. That would be so dramatic and so perfect. Whaddyah think?

Can’t promise if reviewing a second time will become a habit but… I guess you can tell I have your story on my mind nowadays. (Even if I should study and work and write reports and such…) I must say it again I absolutely love this story and you really are an amazing writer! *bows*

hehehehe You did a great job!!!! I enjoyed this chappie like oyu have no idea!!! And the day is not even over, muahaha so much to see yet! HUGS HUGS

Laaerie
Evil-Shawn for a day :D

Ooooh, how fun!

Hehe, Shawn is sooo bad, *grins* That condom scene was wicked, I did laugh. Poor Uri, evil flavored condoms, I once, as a child, thought they were candy and my family and the lady at the shop counter had a good laugh at my expense. Evilness. LOL.

I greatly enjoyed this chapter and I am so glad you got to post it today. I kept wondering what Shawn would say if Uri told him about Rane and then I wondered what lies in Shawn's past and with who he's used all those condoms. hehe.

Um I hope to read the second part of this soon. ^.^

Hello teeta :)
Been following this story since you posted the first chapter, and I have to say it's definately my favourite story in this site, it's just wonderful :D your writing is so fluid, the story is easy to read and the characteres are really interesting. Looking forward to more chappies ^^

Oh and I forgot to say, after reading the 23th chapter I'm guessing Dan and Rane will end up together, something tells me it'll happen but maybe I'm just imaginging things <_< And well we don't want Rane to be alone when Uri and Shawn get together now do we?

Aaaand I loved the bracelet detail... "SHAWN'SLAVE" = Shawn's lave ^^ (I had no idea what lave meant though, had to look it up <_<)