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May 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I just started reading your story a while ago and I love it!! The characters are so wonderful and developed. The plot has the perfect balance between cute and embarrassingly akward to lusty and erotic. You are a great writer!
Please update again soon, thank you!!
Please update again soon, thank you!!
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May 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god! Can I just say that I loved this chapter most of all!? It was so hot! And it kept me on the edge of my seat the entire time. I felt my heart speading up wih Uris, and I just couldn't help but to go crazy with all the teasing. I love the pink apron thing! I so hope to Uri in it! I love that Rane joined in this one as well. I have I mentioned that I loved this chapter? I really can't say enough about it. This review will go on forever if I do though so I'll just say this, you can keep me waiting any time you want if this is the results that we get! Please please post again. Sooner, later, just give me my fix! *Snuggles* You have got to be one of my favorie aurthors by far on this site!
~~Aki
~~Aki
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May 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hello :)
impatiently looking for the continuation... it takes you sooo long ;) i hope it will be as good as long we have to wait for it :D
you can nicely dose emotions and build tension; it really works;
your language is not harmful and unpleasant, rather soft - i like it;
impatiently looking for the continuation... it takes you sooo long ;) i hope it will be as good as long we have to wait for it :D
you can nicely dose emotions and build tension; it really works;
your language is not harmful and unpleasant, rather soft - i like it;
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May 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I started reading Not Supposed To today and I couldn't stand up until I finished it! Your style is amazing! I love this story. I belive it's my favorite from now on! Thak you for creating Shawn and Uri, they are so adorable. (sorry, if my english is not perfect, I'm hungarian. ^^)
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May 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay! That chapter made me happy! I did NOT see the kiss coming. Although I knew people would think he and Shawn were together from the way they were acting. I bet Shawn thinks Uri's giving him totally mixed signals. Because Uri reaaaaaaally is. I mean, all the time Shawn bullies him into.... provocative conversations(although it's more of a contest...) and Uri goes along with it, but then Shawn kisses him and Uri gets REALLY mad. I mean, from Shawn's point of view, this must be really frustrating.
Can't wait for the next chapter!^_^
Dee
Can't wait for the next chapter!^_^
Dee
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May 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well it has been an intersting day so far...Shawn has it as bad as Uri. They need to do some serious talking before having some serious sex! Wonderful chapter dear, can't wait for more!
Meleth
Meleth
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May 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, this is just cruel. I really wanted to find out what the surprise is. And is that bottle lube or massage oil, or something? Lol hiding it from his poor innocent brother. Another great chapter, keep up the great work!
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May 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
whoa, teeta, im sure you've heard this before, but i think your one heck of a fantastic author! it seems like you haven't had a writers block yet! its hard for me to do that, i always get those. But, would you mind starting an email list? like, when you put out a new chapter, could you like email it to certain people who ask for it? Because that would be TOTALLY SWEET! and if you could, #1, you should probably tell me you are going to because im going to leave my email here with you (witch with this email i am entrusting you to keep safe *wink wink nudge nudge* don't sell it to nobody kay? i personally don't want some natural enhancer email in my mailbox >< (im a chick) so yea LOL, but if not, just reply back on the review thing, i'll check it ^^ but here it is : www.dreambubble14@yahoo.com, and well, thanks a whole lot for entertaining me plenty of nights with your story! oh, and if you do decide to do the email thing, if you ever post ANYTHING, would you mind sendin that to me too? OOOH! THIS IS GONNA BE SOOOO AWESOME! YAY! lol. i just hope you DO it! well, keep on chuggin with this awesome story of yours and i hope you don't encounter any writers block! - love ecstatic
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May 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i didn't like the shopping at ALL! >.< (not a fan of it myself...although i can't bring myself ot hate on any of those stores, as i prefer HT buy jeans at GAP as well...)
bit i DID like the meadow scene! ^_^ lol.
& Shawn trying to hide how hot Uri makes him (the whimper into his icecream as he thinks about Uri's oral talents) & Uri being oblivious to it all. lol. ^_^
the kiss was a joke. yeah right. ^_~
& i LOVE the GAP sales associate. *evil cackle*
so....."SHAWN'SLAVE" could go 2 ways i figure:
1) it refers to Shawn as Uri's slave "Shawn=Slave"
2) Love is mispelled as "lave" (which might be from a language i don't know...) & the bracelet DOES refer to Uri... "Shawn's Love"
am i anywhere close on that one?
& "bent as a jar of chips"? lol. i hadn't heard that one! ^_^
bit i DID like the meadow scene! ^_^ lol.
& Shawn trying to hide how hot Uri makes him (the whimper into his icecream as he thinks about Uri's oral talents) & Uri being oblivious to it all. lol. ^_^
the kiss was a joke. yeah right. ^_~
& i LOVE the GAP sales associate. *evil cackle*
so....."SHAWN'SLAVE" could go 2 ways i figure:
1) it refers to Shawn as Uri's slave "Shawn=Slave"
2) Love is mispelled as "lave" (which might be from a language i don't know...) & the bracelet DOES refer to Uri... "Shawn's Love"
am i anywhere close on that one?
& "bent as a jar of chips"? lol. i hadn't heard that one! ^_^
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May 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh dear, this chapter was so hilarious! I just love being able to read all of these little moments between Uri and Shawn.
When Uri was trying on the fishnet shirt, I couldn't help but picture him being a scrawny kid and the shirt being hilariously oversized for him. It was a pretty funny mental image. Same thing goes for Shawn trying on that Grandpa's shirt and making faces at himself in the mirror--oh, I couldn't stop laughing.
Then the kiss--how sweet! x3 I was hoping that maybe Uri would start to get the hint, but obviously... >___> Oh well, that just means that the drama will continue! :D
I felt kind of bad for Shawn that he got yelled at for kissing Uri, but that was kind of twisted into amusement at the fact that Uri didn't want anyone to know that his brother kissed him and yet he was yelling it out in the middle of the crowded mall.
Oh the irony that he was worrying about Rane finding out about his brother kissing him. Maybe he cares a bit more about Rane than he should, considering the fact that he's in love with his brother? -ponders this-
Anyway, the part where they go to the secluded spot was... interesting. I could just imagine how awkward it must've been for Shawn to have to tell his little brother/love interest that he had had sex with someone in the very spot that he was taking Uri, but Uri's reaction kind of surprised me a bit. It was as if he didn't really... care...? I don't know if that's the word that I want to use--the basic idea that I'm trying to say is that he seemed very nonchalant in his reaction. That was interesting to me.
As for the little item that Shawn kept trying to hide... well, I was at first thinking, 'Hey, is he hiding lube from Uri or something?' so I suppose that that's actually my first guess; however, I'm more apt to say that maybe he'll be ordering Uri to give him a massage later or something (ie-lotion). x3
I'm curious! I wanna know what it is and what Shawn has planned for the remainder of their little impromptu "date." ...Even if Uri doesn't know that it's a date, that is.
Great job, teeta!
Luvv yous!
~Endless
When Uri was trying on the fishnet shirt, I couldn't help but picture him being a scrawny kid and the shirt being hilariously oversized for him. It was a pretty funny mental image. Same thing goes for Shawn trying on that Grandpa's shirt and making faces at himself in the mirror--oh, I couldn't stop laughing.
Then the kiss--how sweet! x3 I was hoping that maybe Uri would start to get the hint, but obviously... >___> Oh well, that just means that the drama will continue! :D
I felt kind of bad for Shawn that he got yelled at for kissing Uri, but that was kind of twisted into amusement at the fact that Uri didn't want anyone to know that his brother kissed him and yet he was yelling it out in the middle of the crowded mall.
Oh the irony that he was worrying about Rane finding out about his brother kissing him. Maybe he cares a bit more about Rane than he should, considering the fact that he's in love with his brother? -ponders this-
Anyway, the part where they go to the secluded spot was... interesting. I could just imagine how awkward it must've been for Shawn to have to tell his little brother/love interest that he had had sex with someone in the very spot that he was taking Uri, but Uri's reaction kind of surprised me a bit. It was as if he didn't really... care...? I don't know if that's the word that I want to use--the basic idea that I'm trying to say is that he seemed very nonchalant in his reaction. That was interesting to me.
As for the little item that Shawn kept trying to hide... well, I was at first thinking, 'Hey, is he hiding lube from Uri or something?' so I suppose that that's actually my first guess; however, I'm more apt to say that maybe he'll be ordering Uri to give him a massage later or something (ie-lotion). x3
I'm curious! I wanna know what it is and what Shawn has planned for the remainder of their little impromptu "date." ...Even if Uri doesn't know that it's a date, that is.
Great job, teeta!
Luvv yous!
~Endless