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Niiice XD
Loved this chapter.. heh..
Good that the RP works this well to you ^^,
Can't wait till the next chapters~ Looks nice with a dinner"party", or whatever.
But Shawn looks a bit more affected than I thought he would.. Clenced fists?! Thought the guy was going to pounce him there..
Rane wasn't as hurt in this chapter as you talked about earlier in the forum <.< Guess that comes later?

Hell~~

Uahhhh!!! Cant wait for the dinner. Bitching contest?

Wow ! A lot of things in this chapter !!
Is Shawn know Ran ? Before Uri ? Ok Shawn is jalous but his reaction is weird !
Great chapter... Can't wait for the next !

wow now the story is ON FIRE!
but damn wat a cliff hanger!! can't wait for next chapter!!
i know your pretty good with updating so im trusting you :)

Wow, I love how long the chapters always are :D
I guess that dinner's going to be great fun...ehehe...can't wait to see what will happen. I like how jealous and protective Shawn is while he still kind of manages it to be it in a brotherly way. More or less, at least. Sometimes it's pretty obvious that there's more to it, but Uri's reaction is realistic, because if you don't expect something so unusual, you won't realize it. Ack. I'm not making sense. What I actually mean is that I love the interaction between Uri and Shawn. Surprisingly, I like Rane as well. Normally, I don't especially like characters who "prevent" (for the lack of a better word) the main couple from getting together, but Rane's cool. Seems like he has some dort of superior motive, though.
Anyway, great chapter!

Excellent update, Hon! I can't wait to see what happens at dinner! Shawn is not a happy camper and I think his anger will continue to rise as the evening goes on. Shawn needs to tell Uri how he feels so they can get this straightened out, but I doubt it will happen any time soon. *MEN*

Anxiously awaiting more.

*hugs*

Meleth

Hey hey, long time no review. Still loving it! I would like to offer two little corrections on word usage. It's my way of saying I like your work; by helping you improve even a few small things. (Not that you need a lot of improvement.)

You wrote 'delude of rain,' and I think deluge is probably what you meant.
Pretended boyfriend should be pretend boyfriend. ^^;

I'm loving the plot, and i'm loving your writing. The cuddling during the storm was adorable. Shawn is such a cute little baby. ^_______________^

You'd better update this soon if you know what's good for you! *sharpens axe menacingly*
I loved Shaun's last line. It made me giggle for some reason. Poor Uri. I really love Rane after this chapter. He and Uri should make babies. Then Shaun can steal Uri away! I loved this chapter. I can't wait to see what dinner will be like. Again, I LOVE Rane! A rhyme. Shaun is so obviously jealous!

Wow a new chapter! Woot! OMG so something that's been bugging me since the time when they were at their grandparents...is Shawn adopted?! It seems like you've given hints to it every once in a while (very subtly so I may very well be wrong ^_^). Very good chapter though! More...soon!

ohhh poor Uri, jeeze its so obvious that shawn's jealous, either that or he has a major thing against red-heads (lol)

my younger brother has orange hair...it kinda looks golden

I can't wait to see what happens at dinner