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uuurgh, get rid of rane, its so booring. and no offence but i think hes stupid. and boring...
but shawns brilliant! and their cuddling makes me happy
anyway, yay! finally an update.
oh, and a questions, does shawns story have any parellels with how he sees the whole shawn/uri/rane thing? it sounds like it.
i want some shawn/uri action!! rane/uri is stupid.

Hehe, that's some... interesting bedtime story... poor clueless Uri can't take the hints, hihi. And Shawn never said it was a she? did he?

I had to read this today again, because last night I was just so tired and my mind kept jumping to the odest places. But ANYWAY I was happy to read it again, noticing some parts I had oddly missed...

Rane's little er, green balloon(?) trick, hihi, was amusing. Almost felt sorry for the girl having to go all week being green and all, but only almost, she totally deserved that.

And I just like Rane *sigh* I can't help it *pats Rane* I hope Uri will soon tell his parents and they could... hm... smut *cough*

Ok and so I'll wait for the next update :)

another amazing chapter, completely amazing

Hahahahahahahaha...
I've been impatiently waiting for your new chap,and here it is.It's not what I've expected,but as I said you somehow always manage to surprise me.
I liked this whole bad-time-story concept,and I laughed my ass of when the not-evil-but-a-bit-of-a-perv Wolf was introduced into the story :o)
I can't wait for that damn birthday party,I'll start having dreams about it!
Keep the good work!I am only hoping that the next chap won't take so long.

Hugs,Darma!

Okay. Don't want to hurt your feelings.
But this is boring.
This is not telling the story.
This is not plot/slow-progress.
This is meaningless filler.
The only reason why I'm telling you this is not because I want to be mean but because I like this story. I really liked the first twenty chapters because then you were still telling the story.
I don't know what you're doing at the moment.
It's as if you want to drag it out as much as possible, and while sometimes that's good this is not the case because you're not telling something new with the chapters, you're repeating yourself.
And Rane doesn't have a personality. I'm sorry. But he doesn't.
He's like some fangirl creation made for...I don't know.
This story was really believable at first, but around where Rain seriously came into the picture it suddenly wasn't.

So.
You DON'T have to write so long chapters just because you usually do. Write the story. Nothing else. If you're keeping Rane. Please give him a personality. Don't make him the ideal something, which at the moment I get the feeling you're trying to make him into.

AND STOP RP-ING! Cause I'm getting the feeling that it's because of that the story has become like it has become.

And. I like your story. I really do. And that's the only reason why I'm telling you this. Oterwise I wouldn't have bothered. I would have forgotten about this story, ignored it for the rest of my life.

Lovely chapter. As always. Okay...let's start at the beginning.

I guess I'm starting to like Rane. A little. Lol, no, he's great, I just don't think that Uri would be 100% happy with him. But I love his humor. Like when he asked, when the wall had gotten there.
Then I liked the awkwardness at the beginning of the kiss Uri initiated. It was just so much like Uri :)
It was a nice touch that you had Shawn mention that he has had a sleepless night and then not answer Uri's question. And when Uri didn't even think about calling Rane was kinda like "Hehe, look, he can't be THAT important to you..." But I'm being mean. Rane's a great guy.
Of course I enjoyed the story about Skipping Brunette and her...uh...friends... very much xD Lol. It was sweet of Shawn that he made up a story for Uri, just so he could sleep. :)

Okay, the little story about Skipping Brunette, that was cute. Uberly so. It made me snicker so much!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

I stopped reading this some time back, but I still check on it occasionally. I don't read much of the chapters anymore and I haven't reviewed for a very long time. I thought that this would be the first incest story that was really a actual story, heartaches and truimphs and all.

What happened to 'sports body' , drunken Shawn who kissed Uri on the wrist and started all this. This used to be a sort of family and friends dynamic around Uri's attraction. And Shawns that Uri didn't know about being so blinded by his own worry over his feelings, with Shawn getting closer and with some mystery unraveling? (the parents could use some depth, but otherwise, it was perfect) It used to go forward. I thought this was brilliant and sensitive and warm and mature, now it's another immature high school fic, dragged on too long with the point gone out of it.

I'm writing this to you so that once your done getting a couple thousand reviews and playing the crowd, you'll redo the entire story and make it the work of art it started as. I hope you do that, someday. Because this could be precious and worthy of publishing. But, its your story. Let me ask you this. Which is more important? Writing something worthwhile that makes people of all ages think and really feel on a very touchy subject, or the fan fare of trying to be clever and popular? ja ne

Hmm...the clueless Skipping Brunette, the diabolical Prince Crimson and the pervy but misunderstood Wolf Black? Yeah, I can see where that is going. Good chapter. Very cute with the bedtime story. And poor Uri with his nightmares : (

Looking forward to the next update.

Is it just me or do there seem to be certsain parallels between the skipping brunette story and not supposed to? I can' wait to see what happens in both!

~Canis