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Ok, I was one of those who gave some negative response (and I promise this will be my last comment on this chapter cause I feel like I'm spamming). I just wanted to make it clear that I DON'T want quick action, that was definitely NOT the point. Stories that go straight to sex are not my cup of tea. The progression or action doesn't have to mean jumping to bed, no no no (and that way this story is actually well written!). There could be, however, progression or more plot in some other areas. One thing that might make it seem very repetitive is that this story is already 30 chapters, and it has described every single day in detail as far as I remember. That might be a bit problematic when the character development happens really slowly (it's been what, one week now? sorry if Im wrong).

So, I definitely don't want to hurt the author's feelings, and I'm sorry if that has happened. I just think that in a long run it hurts less if people give critique and are honest. It might give some thoughts and make the story better! But yes, no one can tell the author how to write her story, it's only critique. These are supposed to be reviews right?

Anyway. I stop spamming now. And no matter what I have written here I AM looking forward to the next update! *smile*

Hey Teeta,
It's been quite a while since the last chapter, I've missed you! That is horrible that poor Uri suffers nightmares, but so cute that Shawn snuggles and tells stories. Rane is such a good boyfriend, awe, he may have devious motives though. I wish Uri would get with Shawn or that Shawn would get a boyfriend. That would really blow Uri's mind, and all along he thought he was straight. Yea, and when Uri finally comes out to his parents/Shawn that'll be something else. I think his mom figured it out already though. Yea, I'll be signing up for that e-mail list!

Can't wait until your update,
downward spiral

Well, well ! Another great chapter ! I think Shawn is the evil one !! ;P
And I can't wait for the party...

this chapter was awsome... i loved the story

storytime? very subtle, shawn, very.
I guess now I can start to figure it all out...plenty of clues after all....
and I would kill uri...can't he shut his mouth....spoiling the story and all....so impatient....
anyway...I decided that I don't want uri and rane together after all....uri doesn't love him, so being together isn't anyhting but wrong....
but I AM STILL a ran fan.....that will never change....
hmmm....almost a 1000 reviews now....congratulations......
I'm not trying to make the 1000. though....I bet people are waiting in front of the computer just to score it....
so I'm quite satisfied with number 999...soooo much nicer anyway...
ehm....and horse in latin is equus, if I remember correctly....I could of course engage my dictionary, but the word is stuck in my brain this way and I'm pretty sure...
and please, please read the stupid challenge thingy soon, so I can delete it from my account...I hate it and people don't seem to like it any better....at least they're not inclined to tell me if they do...and why would they? it is crap...

but we'll make it a thousand, won't we....
since I got the opportunity...*evil laugh*
no honestly....delete this one and give other people a chance

Hi, I really liked this story! more please? :)

Something gives me the impression, that Skipping Brunette Black Wolf Prince Crimson are not only imaginary characters. They really resemle Uri Shawn and Rane aren't they? Well if it's true, then Shawn thinks really bad of Rane, but I don't know, I kinda like him, he is nice to Uri. But why isn't then Ury part of the familly. I thought that maybe Shawn is not really his brother, just his cusin. But now I think I have to think about it a bit more... hmm....
Well, anyway I will love the moment when Uri will tell his parents that he is gay. And I'm curious about Shayn's party aswell ^^. And I love the way the two brothers sleep together now. So sweet.

Lovely chapter, and I'm glad it finally arrived, I mean it took almost a month *she whines* And the last three weeks I checked for the new chapter every day (some times 5-6 times a day) but I'm very happy that it is finally here and it was lovely as allways.^^

*hugs you, and your muse aswell*
Thank you!!

Ok, I want to add. Maybe this wasn't exactly a filler, because Shawn's story must have something to do with those three boys. BUT. I have to admit that I did skip most of the Rane parts cause they just seem more and more unrealistic, quite immature... Also the high school stuff to me is really unrealistic. And, well. Sometimes I can't help but think Uri acts a bit too much like a girl (don't wanna be stereotypical to neither boys or girls, but sometimes it just gets a bit too much).

I enjoyed this story quite a lot earlier, and I was really waiting for the updates... But after some time I started to get impression that you want to drag it on as long as possible, and it is getting a bit too much (as someone here already pointed out). It just doesn't seem to go anywhere anymore. I mean, I love long stories, but to write a good long story you need subtance, and you need to think long and hard how to develop the characters etc. I want to believe you do have talent for that, but I get the impression that right now you're too focused on creating the tension (which always gives lots of reviews), but enough is enough IMHO, and in fact the whole tension aspect is in danger of fading out.

Anyway, I will keep reading this cause I really liked it at first, and I still kinda do, but I hope you think about the critique you've gotten with this chapter.

Awww. When I read the first chapters of this story I thought Shawn was cool, but he's waaay obsessive. Raine on the other hand... The Perfect Boyfriend.
... ... ...Now if only he'd hump Uri. :3
And OMG you deserve so much love for writing so much in so little time. Seriously.

(And there's absolutely no reason and/or right for us readers to tell you what to write. It IS your story. *looks suspiciously at the previous comments with a raised eyebrow*)