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btw,
I'm going to sacrifice a cute cuddly woodland creature every day until the next update. So, update quickly or the bunny gets it in the neck.

OH MY GOD...I 've waited like ages for this update.I think I discovered your story while one of your long absence between updates and get to read it at once.I love it.LOVE IT.Tis chapter brake my heart though...I so wanted for them to finally get together.I hope (fingers crossed) u're gonna make it happen in the last two chapters.And now that the revelation came and they're not brothers (!!!!!!) it will be easier.update soon ! Aida

omg omg omg omg omg omg I'M FREAKING OUT!!!!!!!
HOW COULD YOU STOP IT THERE!!!!!????
HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????????
you have got to write the next chapter before i literally DIE!
cousin!? what!? and what the hell is wrong with Shaun?
this story is going to give me a heart attack one day lol

OMG!! That was the most increbile amazing wOw oh WoW chapter:) I can't even fine the words for how much I just loved it?! I'm sorry when I first saw the chapter up I was thinking how much I misses you. Then after reading I almost forgot to tell you that! You were misses but definitely not forgotten:) The cliffy is heart stopping it's great! If I wasn't ALREADY hooked I sure would be after that! WoW! As always it was fantantic! I think I'm emotionlly spend for the rest of the evening:) It sad knowing it's comming to the end but at the same time I want to know what you have in mind for the end?! Thank you for the wonderful read ^_^

I read this entire story in one night and I am hooked... I have a suspicion about Uri...gathered from me and what his parents were talking about it but just in case someone else hasn't guessed it I won't say anything...I love this story and it made me tear a few times...finish it soon so I know what happens... I feel so bad for Shawn and Uri...I love their names by the way... I LOVE IT and I REALLY WANT YOU TO WRITE MORE SOON!!!!

~Dark_Lady

I will be checking this story soon and hoping for updates...maybe as a Christmas present to all your fans you could finish the story... Just a thought ;)

Gah, I can't keep -all- of what happened in the -right- order in my head, to review sensibly on it all xD But I can say I flat out -loved- it! What happened at the festival, mmhmmm hot! I feel horrible for Rane, I really liked him a lot, poor guy! But oh oh, if Dan does like Rane, I think it'd be crazy awesome if they got together. Eeeyah, it's so frustrating, for Shawn and Uri, being in love, and having to be super careful. But what their mom said at one point got me thinking about something. She said "I was scared that Shawn would push Uri away when he got to know, which thankfully didn't happen" Ahah, got to know what? Makes me think/hope that maybe Shawn and Uri aren't real brothers. Like one of them is adopted or a different mom or dad or something. I think I would be AWESOME. Cause then it's not illegal, them being together, even though I love incest, they wouldn't have as many problems to deal with! Anyways, I am, as always, excitedly awaiting more!

Oh, I feel I must review before I read more. I've read about 21 of the current 38 chapters, and getting to the end and then reviewing will be too hard, too much reading and stuff going on to try and do it in one review! So, oh my I must say, I love me some incest. But you don't come across many stories that go into things like vomiting, and other ways that Uri reacts. Many don't go into the possible physical things that may occur, or emotional and mental distress that comes with realizing you have feelings for your own brother. While I'd rather focus on the incest myself xD I do like how you brought it into the story, makes you feel for Uri. Gah, I should have reviewed sooner! I stayed up half the night reading, I was so hooked, about 4am I decided I really did need to get some sleep and stopped. So much to recall! I'll probably end up re-reading this story eventually, I re-read stories, complete and incomplete, that I like a lot.

Anyways! I love Rane! The minute he came into the story, I liked him. I think him and Uri are cute, even if they are doing it for their own reasons. His first kiss and all, it's cute how Rane teases him. I also love all thats going between Shawn and Uri, so much tension and feelings, unsureness, the want to help, and the want of help, but also the fear and uncertainty. I love all of the things the story points at with Shawn, well that I draw, at least. Like the person he loves but can't confront with his feelings, I totally think it's Uri. When Uri is recalling his brother going through a stage where he was really different, I think that's when Shawn fell for Uri, hence the odd stage/phase. I can't wait to see what's going to happen between them! I want something to snap or slip out, and for Shawn to realize something or Uri to slip up, and then BAM some kind of confrontation, and then yummy incest, yay! But I can be patient!

Ugh, Uri's parents bother me some. If my mom assumed every person I talked about was somehow possibly in a relationship with me, that'd be annoying. And Dan totally freakin' out over Uri being gay! I think it's more of a, I'm your friend why didn't you tell me - thing, rather than a homophobe - thing, or something. And of course all good stories must have the bad guy; Kyle. I will admit, I first thought he was just going to beat the crap outta Uri or something, but he kissed him! I'm glad Uri has Rane to be his manly protective boyfriend xD

Okay, enough rambling for now. I shall read more chapters and review again! By the way, I freakin' love this story!!!!!

( This is as of me reading up until ch 27 ) I love when Rane introduces Uri to his friends, I love him teasing Uri, it's just so funny! That steamy dream that Uri has in the kitchen, after which he creams himself; I totally loved that! Oh, and I love the slave day as a birthday present for Shawn! And definitly the gel bracelet that he gives Uri, that is just awesome. Plus all that happens in that day, the black shirt that looks amazing on Shawn and that game they play that's almost like strip poker in a way xD I laughed a lot at the random and unexpected funny/odd things, and the reactions and such. And I also love how Rane uses the slave idea for himself, him and Uri are just so cute together. But anyways, love love love it all, and now, to continue reading!

Wow, so much has happened since I last had a chance to read this, and what can I say, it just keeps getting better and better. Well most of it XD I'm still somewhat upset for Rane. I liked him.

I like how we keep learning more about the characters as you go along, Uri is quite the complicated little boy, so many emotions :D

I'm looking foward to when he talks to Rane again, it will be very interesting, and I'm gonna guess that it is also gonna be very upsetting. I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in ages, or had a chance to read, hope everythings okay!

Hi,

Just wanted to let you know that this story is the best piece of fiction I've ever read. Not just fanfiction, but fiction period.
I've spend about 24 hours reading this with only breaks to eat, sleep and use the toilet. I was captivated from the first chapter.
Your prose is immaculate and your characterisation spot on. At the beginning I was annoyed with the slow pace of the story, but now I really respect your decision to take the time, the story is much more realistic, mature and deep that way.
Your characterisation of Uri is perfect. He is the embodiement of a confused, sexually maturing 15-year-old.
I also love Rane. It's unusual for me to change my oppinion of a character so often as I did in with Rane. First I dismissed him as trivial and slightly annoying, then (when they got together as 'pretend' boyfriends) I kept on getting this vibe that he is secretly evil, the I fell in love with how sweet and caring he truly is. At that point I actually wanted him and Uri to stay together, because they are both so lovable and have been hurt so much already. And this is saying a lot, because I was rooting for Shawn/Uri from the very beginning! I really hope you'll get Rane a sweet and loving boyfrind soon, he deserves it (maybe Dan? ;) ).
And then Shawn...your physical description of him is practically my wet dream. I think I fell in love with him together with Uri.

If I may, I would like to provide a piece of con crit. Please don't be offended, like I said I absolutely adore this story and as an original fanfic it's already perfect. This is only as a pointer if you would like to publish some of your writing, maybe even this one, because I think you easily could. Your writing is that good. Ok, back to what I wanted to say... I think compared to your wonderful characterisation of Uri and Rane, Shawn remains a bit of an enigma. I miss his feelings in on all of what is happening. I men, we've seen him lusting after Uri, we've seen him being jealous, we've seen him beeing a goofball. But isn't he scared, confused, frustrated of the whole situation? I would love to seen more feelings coming from him and not him only reacting to what Uri says or does. (This is of course just my opinion, I do understand and respect the choices you're made with the characters. This piece is obviously from Uri's point of view, so it's logical to fucus on him).
The same thing basically on their parents. The me they were a bit too understanding and easy going on both of their sons coming out and dating and everything, definitely considering they are religious. I feel like I don't know a single thing about their father.

So yeah, finishing my 'essay' now haha. I really can't wait untill the next chapter! Please, please, please write more soon! (I kind of have an idea where you are going with the story. I mean the piece of paper in that book at their granparents' house was a clue right? I gives me hope that the story will not end in tragedy. Not that even then it'll be all peachy, but at least Shawn won't be at risk of a prison sentence. But which one of the boys is... ) I won't say to much for the people who haven't understood the clue and will remain humbly awaiting the next chapter.

Natalie