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for Not supposed to

by teeta

person kanjil
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Uri is lucky to have real friends in all this mess, even more so as he doesn't want to confide in his brother. Shawn is a really complex character, acting lazy and selfish sometimes, although the cooking scene showed he isn't beyond changing, and and then being perceptive and caring again. Perhaps realizing that by turning away from Shawn he also loses a friend will cause Uri to think his past decisions concerning him over. I can't wait for the next update. Awesome story! Thank you and a happy new year!
person Bards Apprentice
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL! fine then -i choose Shawn, but huuuuuurrry!! i'm getting sooo tired of waiting! ^_^
your English was much better in these last few chapters!! keep up the good improvements!
person nastyscarythingunderthebed
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*cowers form shot gun* ^^;;

Hehe, so what happens next? if anyone tries to pick on Uri, I'll bet Rane beats them up (because he seems like the type of guy) or maybe I'm way off the mark. Oh well. Uri is being stupid again >.< Of course it probably only seems like that since the fans know a very vital piece of information that he doesn't, but still....

*starts re-doing the pic....again*
person Lychee
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Aww, Shaun is such a good brother! His so sweet to Uri, cross my fingers that they live happily ever after... and that friend of Uri's the one going out with Nancy (not very good with names), that guy sure is sneaky... And Haha everyone thinks Uri is gay, lol the irony of it all.
person luckeme
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well now, being bored I decided to find a new story to read and...

I read the first chapter of this one!

=)

That was so adorable! Yah! I found a new story to read, I was sort of sad that the ones I'm reading I'm done with or waiting for updates

I love it so far. Thanks muchly! Going to get coffee and come back and read more!
person luckeme
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM

read two more chapters. I forgot to mention I tried to read a few other stories before finding this. I never comment on stories I don't like something about. Who wants pity reviews? (I get them sometimes...like 'keep trying, you'll get it, eventually' yup, that's an actual review I got...poor, poor me)

ANYWAY, sorry bout above. I ranted shamelessly. So Uri's hot and doesn't know it, all the girls want him...but he doesn't notice, hmmmm... His brother blushing and getting mad...he likes his brother alot doesn't he *wink*

Great smut potential. Not that it's the reason I'm reading, no not me...

Very cute so far and very good writing!!!!
person luckeme
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry about reading this too late to help with your questions...I'm sure you had plenty of help already, if not for whatever reason, you can email xxxluckeeexxx aol.

I feel bad for Uri right now, but at least he's not going emo...he's thinking of practical solutions, good ones too.

Another great angsty chapter!!
person Kolgrim
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What a happy surprise coming home from work and see that you had updated sooner than what I expected :) Uri seems to have his problems only increasing, poor boy. I wonder what Rane will say about the rumours? ;) Oh darn I'm so hopeless, aren't I? I liked the supper making scene, just got an icky reminder of the time I cut myself, placed the finger in my mouth and almost fainted from he mere amount of blood *shivers*
Wish there was more to read *sigh*
Thank you for this chapter!
person luckeme
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I finished what you had written, in a way it was like one chapter.

God, you sure have writing angst down to a science, I mean that in the best way possible!

I love how you've taken it slow and built up suspense. High school drama doesn't usually interest me, it never did, even when I was in it...but you made me so sympathetic to Uri, so close to him that I am actually enjoying it.

If that's not talent...I don't know what is!

I look forward to more...
person Yblue
schedule December 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah yes thanks for the awkward moment, lol. The kiss was funny. It satisfied me... for now XD Though my favorite part in this chapter was probably Uri choking on Shawn's moan. That was really great. And Uri is afraid of spiders. That made me laugh too. I'm happy for him he doesn't live in my setting, lol.