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January 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Yay, the 'action' part! Finally!...Alright, this sounds...ehem...wrong? *shakes head* No, it's not. ^_^
This was a great chapter. Actually, when I first read your comments above before the actual chapter, I thought the 'action' part would be different, but I don't mind how it turned out. I like it even better, you surprised me.
This was a great chapter. Actually, when I first read your comments above before the actual chapter, I thought the 'action' part would be different, but I don't mind how it turned out. I like it even better, you surprised me.
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January 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG This fic is just amazing. I feel so sorry for Uri. It must be awfull to have feelings for someone and to think these feelings are wrong. He is a really great charecter. So real. You realy are amazing. Please update soon.
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January 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 13
Two chapters already, wow! You sure write fast( not that I am complaining, hehe)
I DID know that there will be a problem with sleeping arrangements at the gran's house! It should be with four people coming to stay. So cute how Uri had panicked and tried to get out of it. They still treat him as a child, so no luck here.
Shawn was so happy about it, though. Why does he change in front of Uri, is he testing his reaction or what?
Shawn is not really Uri's brother, is he? A first cousin, is'nt he?
Oh, dear, everybody knows that Shawn is gay! Except for poor Uri. This is so well written, I started laughing, actually, and it was not supposed to be funny. Uri really must be his family's little angel, they don't want to traumatize the poor thing. Shawn is in agony over this, he beleives Uri to be an angel too. Really well written. The car scene was hot:)
Two chapters already, wow! You sure write fast( not that I am complaining, hehe)
I DID know that there will be a problem with sleeping arrangements at the gran's house! It should be with four people coming to stay. So cute how Uri had panicked and tried to get out of it. They still treat him as a child, so no luck here.
Shawn was so happy about it, though. Why does he change in front of Uri, is he testing his reaction or what?
Shawn is not really Uri's brother, is he? A first cousin, is'nt he?
Oh, dear, everybody knows that Shawn is gay! Except for poor Uri. This is so well written, I started laughing, actually, and it was not supposed to be funny. Uri really must be his family's little angel, they don't want to traumatize the poor thing. Shawn is in agony over this, he beleives Uri to be an angel too. Really well written. The car scene was hot:)
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January 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 14
Hey, teeta ,
That was a really long chapter! It's like 35 KB of plain text, wow. You did pull it off-the build-up and the bedroom scene. I am so glad that this thing did not turn out OOC. It was so right, all the anguish and desire on both sides and being unable to cross the chasm, so to speak. It was only a week ago that Uri realized that he is attracted to his brother! And later figured out his sex orientation. That's a lot for one week, he is supposed to be all jumpy and stressed out. He is going through the same thing that Shawn went through two years ago, so cute.
I actually went back to chapter 13 to see which items Uri packed for the trip. Nope, no pajamas, hahaha.
It was sort of rude of his family not to tell Uri about the surprize party. He was the only one without a present to give! They really do treat him like a child.
Poor Shawn, he is afraid to tell Uri that he is gay even, that makes it completely impossible to admit that he loves him! Poor dude is happy to receive a hug! He can't sleep at night! Something needs to happen to help them out.
Having Shawn to 'get a move' on Uri during a wet dream was a good idea, he is too insecure to do it while concsious. There is no doubt in my mind that he dreamt of Uri. And the first moment, when he woke up and saw Uri, he beleived that it is still a dream. Well done.
Uri is oblivios even in his sleep. I mean, he thought that it was a puppy!
Well done, teeta:D
Thank you.
Hey, teeta ,
That was a really long chapter! It's like 35 KB of plain text, wow. You did pull it off-the build-up and the bedroom scene. I am so glad that this thing did not turn out OOC. It was so right, all the anguish and desire on both sides and being unable to cross the chasm, so to speak. It was only a week ago that Uri realized that he is attracted to his brother! And later figured out his sex orientation. That's a lot for one week, he is supposed to be all jumpy and stressed out. He is going through the same thing that Shawn went through two years ago, so cute.
I actually went back to chapter 13 to see which items Uri packed for the trip. Nope, no pajamas, hahaha.
It was sort of rude of his family not to tell Uri about the surprize party. He was the only one without a present to give! They really do treat him like a child.
Poor Shawn, he is afraid to tell Uri that he is gay even, that makes it completely impossible to admit that he loves him! Poor dude is happy to receive a hug! He can't sleep at night! Something needs to happen to help them out.
Having Shawn to 'get a move' on Uri during a wet dream was a good idea, he is too insecure to do it while concsious. There is no doubt in my mind that he dreamt of Uri. And the first moment, when he woke up and saw Uri, he beleived that it is still a dream. Well done.
Uri is oblivios even in his sleep. I mean, he thought that it was a puppy!
Well done, teeta:D
Thank you.
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January 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I usually don't like any incest what so ever, but the way you wrote this doesn't make it seem so bad...it kind of put us readers in his position. Beautifully written, I can't wait for the next update. =)
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love this story!!!! Soooooo much!!!! Update, please. please!!!!
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
very good chapter ! can't wait for the next...
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January 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hehe, you are a tricky one - but you're tricky a good way. ^^; Ty for the little bit of..action that wasn't really action but still, i'm happy lol. Aha, and also..I knew from the moment Uri was cold in bed that him and Shawn would end up cuddling. Keke.
Keep the writing up, and thanks for the chapter. I appreciate the weekly updatessss. :)
Keep the writing up, and thanks for the chapter. I appreciate the weekly updatessss. :)
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January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
XD Brilliant. This chapter had me cracking up, although I feel so very bad for Shawn and Uri. This isn't going to be easy for them, that's for sure. LOL And you're right-that last line was perfect. Absolutely and utterly perfect. ~sighs~ I'm so in love with this fic that it's not even fair. :p
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January 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOL!!! until i saw your comment to my last review i was about to queery as to whether it's actually RANE that Shawn might be dreaming about....
but no! it's still Uri! ^_^
& DAMMIT! but why didn't Shawn moan his name or notice Uri's erection!! >.< you're KILLING me here!
at least we finally got to see SOME action. *shrug* ^_^
i'm wondering, was Shawn upset because he thinks Uri would be traumitized?....he KNOWS Uri thinks he's attractive
or is he thinking the same way Uri is? "he's my brother. i'm disgusting."?....
& i bet that wasn't a COLD shower Shawn took. ^_~
so my only theory at the moment is that everyone knows that Shawn is gay but Uri.... & that's all i got since u blew the other ideas away.... ~.~
but no! it's still Uri! ^_^
& DAMMIT! but why didn't Shawn moan his name or notice Uri's erection!! >.< you're KILLING me here!
at least we finally got to see SOME action. *shrug* ^_^
i'm wondering, was Shawn upset because he thinks Uri would be traumitized?....he KNOWS Uri thinks he's attractive
or is he thinking the same way Uri is? "he's my brother. i'm disgusting."?....
& i bet that wasn't a COLD shower Shawn took. ^_~
so my only theory at the moment is that everyone knows that Shawn is gay but Uri.... & that's all i got since u blew the other ideas away.... ~.~