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February 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
T_T You almost killed me with that last part of the chapter. Please update soon, I need to know what happens next!
I LOVE your story! I want moremoremore of it!
I LOVE your story! I want moremoremore of it!
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
The chapter is absolutely worth the wait, it's wonderful and gripping. I think Uri's emotions, thoughts and behaviour under these circumstances are realistic as well as that the stress causes such dreams and insomnia, especially since he tries to repress his unwanted feelings so much. The reconciliation scene is also credible in my opinion, because it's understandable that Uri's fears turn up full force in his nightmare and the aftermath makes him reveal them to Shawn, whose reaction to this is in character. Besides after a dream and its effects aggravated Uri's situation it's an excellent turn that a dream eases it again. That Uri's friends don't let him down is a imaginable change from the cliché, while his other schoolmates' demeanour was to be expected. And of course you haven't lost me (I just had trouble with the PC). "Not supposed to" is one of my (few) favourite stories after all.*hugs*
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for another fantastic chapter ... His dreams, or rather nightmares, are rather vivid ... a very wicked, subconsious imagination he has there ... And as always, keep up the great writing and I hope your muse doesn't go to far this time, unless it comes up with other great plots.
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YESSSS finally an update.
This is a very good story, and I hope to see action between Uri and Shawn who obviouslly loves his little brother as much as Uri does to him.
Bye
This is a very good story, and I hope to see action between Uri and Shawn who obviouslly loves his little brother as much as Uri does to him.
Bye
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16 was very cute. Great job on making Uri feel a bit better. :D
Man, Shawn gets to do all the fun stuff. I wish I could pet Uri too. *glares at Shawn.* He'd better watch it. >.>
Keep up the good work. *sits and waits for next chappie*
Man, Shawn gets to do all the fun stuff. I wish I could pet Uri too. *glares at Shawn.* He'd better watch it. >.>
Keep up the good work. *sits and waits for next chappie*
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg, loved this chapters [technical errors and all XD] and believe it was worth the wait
it kept me wanting more and more and more, but that tends to be the case everytime i finish a chapter. the nightmares were a lovely touch and the ending to this chapter was just perfect. i swear i did my litte awww-shigh after that. it was really cute, shawn and him sleeping together like that.
haha, now THIS is the progress i wanted XD
oh, and i was actually thinking about it the other day and came to the conclusion that [if the hints are true] that uri is the one who was adopted [or just not directly related to the family]. i mean, the grandparents like shawn better, his mom was all supicious in that waaaaay back, earlier chapter. just a thought though.
ive said it before, but ill say it again.
i. love. this.
*waits for update*
it kept me wanting more and more and more, but that tends to be the case everytime i finish a chapter. the nightmares were a lovely touch and the ending to this chapter was just perfect. i swear i did my litte awww-shigh after that. it was really cute, shawn and him sleeping together like that.
haha, now THIS is the progress i wanted XD
oh, and i was actually thinking about it the other day and came to the conclusion that [if the hints are true] that uri is the one who was adopted [or just not directly related to the family]. i mean, the grandparents like shawn better, his mom was all supicious in that waaaaay back, earlier chapter. just a thought though.
ive said it before, but ill say it again.
i. love. this.
*waits for update*
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hi Teeta! That was a wonderful chapter! Very exciting and full of ... really good (naughty) things LOL
You can see just how inspired you were for this chapter because it`s abundent in descriptions, emotions, action. I liked the fact that Uri is trying to be stronger and not cry so much. He should realise crying doesn`t change things.. at worst it will just make his eyes puffy. He should just sit down and think things through... (for now) to think of a way to escape this obession he has with his brother (but what us fans want) that he accepts these feelings and do something about them.
I liked the progressive development in his dreams/nightmares. At first he dreams about kissing Shawn. his next nightdream is focused on his fear that Shawn hates him and in the third dream he allows himself to let the fantasy unfold and openly watch Shawn bathing and using his image to masturbate (and since we`re at this topic, My God What A Hot Scene that was... I was wiping the drool off the keyboard LOL. It was very well handled, the slow actions that show his uncertainty but at the same time the lust he feels for Shawn`s hot body that can no longer be opressed... damn, even I would be turned on if I was giving such an eye-candy to admire showering LOL). I was a bit amazed about the violence in his last dream. I can`t imagine what made him dream of that, maybe it was the punch he got at school. Though the dream did pay off. He got to snuggle in Shawn`s arms and be assured that his big brother doesn`t hate him. Aww... that was such a cute and fluffy scene. Couldn`t Uri just turn and jump on him, shower Shawn with kisses and continue the dream? XD...I know, wishful thinking of a fan.
I laughed so hard when Uri have that line to Kyle. The kittle jerk deserved it!! Mesing with Uri like that. I can just bet Kyle has a crush on him but can`t bring himself to admit it and is taking it all on Uri because he feels Uri is somehow making him feel like that. Not to mention he must be a little jealous that someone stepped in and protected Uri last time he tried to make fun of him. I might be wrong about Kyle, he may turn out to be straight but there`s some weird things about him...
I was laughing and at the same time sympathising with Uri when he thought of Shawn during P.E. I mean, of course Shawn is hotter than any of those wimp at his school but he sure found a bad moment to think about that. Like he said, you don`t want to go blushing in front of your colleagues (male colleagues) who think you might be gay. And not during P.E.
There might be other things I noticed and wanted to talk about but they slipped my mind at the moment. But this chapter was HOT... and I don`t mean just the shower (the dream and the reality bit) but everything. And Uri is feeling better. Not vomiting so much. He just needs time to adjust to these new feelings and thoughts. But he is slowly accepting them so his stomach is not so irritated so easily. It`s funny how, just like Uri said it`s his body that comes in betwen him and having a perfect family, it`s his body again that wants Shawn but reacts so bad when Uri thinks of his brother "that" way.
Man, I love your story! Update soon! PLEASEEEEEE!!
You can see just how inspired you were for this chapter because it`s abundent in descriptions, emotions, action. I liked the fact that Uri is trying to be stronger and not cry so much. He should realise crying doesn`t change things.. at worst it will just make his eyes puffy. He should just sit down and think things through... (for now) to think of a way to escape this obession he has with his brother (but what us fans want) that he accepts these feelings and do something about them.
I liked the progressive development in his dreams/nightmares. At first he dreams about kissing Shawn. his next nightdream is focused on his fear that Shawn hates him and in the third dream he allows himself to let the fantasy unfold and openly watch Shawn bathing and using his image to masturbate (and since we`re at this topic, My God What A Hot Scene that was... I was wiping the drool off the keyboard LOL. It was very well handled, the slow actions that show his uncertainty but at the same time the lust he feels for Shawn`s hot body that can no longer be opressed... damn, even I would be turned on if I was giving such an eye-candy to admire showering LOL). I was a bit amazed about the violence in his last dream. I can`t imagine what made him dream of that, maybe it was the punch he got at school. Though the dream did pay off. He got to snuggle in Shawn`s arms and be assured that his big brother doesn`t hate him. Aww... that was such a cute and fluffy scene. Couldn`t Uri just turn and jump on him, shower Shawn with kisses and continue the dream? XD...I know, wishful thinking of a fan.
I laughed so hard when Uri have that line to Kyle. The kittle jerk deserved it!! Mesing with Uri like that. I can just bet Kyle has a crush on him but can`t bring himself to admit it and is taking it all on Uri because he feels Uri is somehow making him feel like that. Not to mention he must be a little jealous that someone stepped in and protected Uri last time he tried to make fun of him. I might be wrong about Kyle, he may turn out to be straight but there`s some weird things about him...
I was laughing and at the same time sympathising with Uri when he thought of Shawn during P.E. I mean, of course Shawn is hotter than any of those wimp at his school but he sure found a bad moment to think about that. Like he said, you don`t want to go blushing in front of your colleagues (male colleagues) who think you might be gay. And not during P.E.
There might be other things I noticed and wanted to talk about but they slipped my mind at the moment. But this chapter was HOT... and I don`t mean just the shower (the dream and the reality bit) but everything. And Uri is feeling better. Not vomiting so much. He just needs time to adjust to these new feelings and thoughts. But he is slowly accepting them so his stomach is not so irritated so easily. It`s funny how, just like Uri said it`s his body that comes in betwen him and having a perfect family, it`s his body again that wants Shawn but reacts so bad when Uri thinks of his brother "that" way.
Man, I love your story! Update soon! PLEASEEEEEE!!
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16
I forgive you for making me wait...it was worth it, a nice long juicy chapter. *grin*
Poor Uri. Now it's nightmares. He can't even escape in sleep. Or in school. Or at home.
He is so cute, the way he thinks and the things that keep happening to him, I do feel sorry for him, but you make it amusing, too.
I am very glad they made up.
Well done, teeta.
I forgive you for making me wait...it was worth it, a nice long juicy chapter. *grin*
Poor Uri. Now it's nightmares. He can't even escape in sleep. Or in school. Or at home.
He is so cute, the way he thinks and the things that keep happening to him, I do feel sorry for him, but you make it amusing, too.
I am very glad they made up.
Well done, teeta.
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh your story is so frustrating! sometimes I just want to yell "ADMIT IT!" at your two main characters! but it's a good thing that things are progressing slowly, because it makes me want more of this and it keeps the suspense! I just hope it won't end like a drama (I don't want to cry, at the end, so evil author, don't make me cry!). your style is nice and some scenes are really sweet and cute. I love the end of this chapter! oh! tenderness! I think that many slash stories don't have that "tenderness" side and it's good that you succeed in integrating sweet (but not schmaltzy) aspects in your story!
now, I'm waiting for your next chapter! I can hardly wait!
now, I'm waiting for your next chapter! I can hardly wait!
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful. <3