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Their dialogue was brilliant, their teasing so amusing. I'm glad that the mood lightened and Uri's and Shawn's humour is back. And what an evil cliffhanger, that twist was not predictable, but not improbable, too. Since I'm (again) late, I hope to read more soon. Thank you!

I discovered this fic a little while ago and I haven’t been able to stop myself re-reading parts of it (I’m sure you can guess which ones). It’s driving me crazy. I love how long it’s taking for anything to happen, but at the same time I desperately want Shawn to just throw Urie down and molest him. I check like twice a day for an update even though I found it when you last posted.
I love everything about this, how oblivious Urie is, being innocent but not; how Shawn can laugh about it one minute, and go get trashed the next. I love the tension and all the unanswered questions. I love Urie’s little side thoughts and I love how everything is just sorta happening to him and he’s sitting back, utterly bemused and trying not to hurl.
And despite my anxiousness, I love the pace. I enjoy reading each chapter and looking for the seeming innocuous (or not) comments and moments that pass right over Urie’s head.
So, yeah, all in all, this is probably my favourite fic right now, and definitely my favourite original of all time.
PLEASE KEEP WRITING!

OMG!! best chapter yet!!! i love this story, your characters are so well developed and completly believable. please update as soon as possible.
ur dedicated fan
kel
p.s. do you have any stories you recomend, because you seem like you have good taste

O.O I’m in shock! I totally didn’t see this coming. Why didn’t I see this coming? It’s great, lol. That’s Uri’s first French kiss right? I bet he never guessed it would be with the worst jock/asshole/bully. LOL I wonder if anybody saw this? And what is Kyle going to do next? Does he plan on making Uri his unwilling rape victim? Or does he actually think Uri wants him? I think it’s safe to say he used the wrong tactics if that was the plan. So…. Rane to the rescue?

Splendid touché on Shawn’s part at the dinner table btw. My guess is he’s on to something.

Gaaaaah!!!!!!!! A Clifhanger!!!! >.<


And i've waited soo long 4 u 2 update...

EVIL...

Wow!

Chapter 17 was simply delicious... in so may ways... LOL

First of all, I`m sorry Shawn woke up so early. It would have been nice (and interesting) to see the two of them wake up together in bed. My imagination was already going wild with different scenarios about how the two would react to such a situation... or the way they would wake up...maybe in each other`s arms... HEH

At first when I saw Shawn acting like that, apologizing for the other night... that seemed a bit OOC but then he got back to the Shawn we know...and totally surprised me with that little stunt he pulled..the little pun upon words. At first I couldn`t believe it, afterwards I was like.. "Ok, who`s dreaming here? Who kidnapped Shawn and where is the real one?" to finally say...."Shawn baby, I hope you do more than just talk and finally get the courage to do something about your passion for Uri"... Boy was I happy when the little accident happened...and Shawn ended up falling on top of Uri. LOL No wonder Shawn didn`t want to get up... he finally gets a chance to hump his little brother and Uri doesn`t let him enjoy the moment... ROFL...that was such a heated moment... along with the conversation in the kitchen... I really thought he was for real, Shawn I mean... and the thing Shawn said, what Uri could do with his tongue... ROFL... damn...was Uri ever shocked LOL..pity Shawn didn`t hold his ground and make Uri go all the way....

But it wasn`t like Uri didn`t deserve it... he was mean, too..."hard". Congrats Teeta for those brilliant lines...they were so witty and perfect..especially the last one..."no hard feelings"...damn..I was laughing so "hard" my mom came in asking me what was SOO FUNNY!... I had to make up something really quick and my face must have turned red...LOL

I didn`t quite get it what Shawn meant when he said Uri had guessed his feelings, exactly what Shawn was feeling... hope that will clear itself in the next chapter(s). And why was he so cold when Uri came back to ask Shawn to give him a ride to school? Was there supposed to be something there to notice and I just missed it? And what was Shawn doing when he dropped Uri off at school... keep your hands home mister...not in public... not yet anyway :P

And, now Kyle... I KNEW IT... I understand now why I get the cookie, LOL I just knew he would pull something like that... I just knew it. The little bugger just had to go and kiss Uri. I pray to God he didn`t steal Uri`s first kiss because if he did... I`ll kill him. That kiss belongs to Shawn *cries* And somehow, I could see that scene in my head, felt it would happen. I just don`t want Kyle to become bolder in his demands or actually fall for Uri and want to go steady... God, the latter would be even worse.

And PLEASE.... don`t you dare use Kyle to torture Uri or Shawn in any way. I know Laaerie might have tempted you with a million things to insert some punishment there. But don`t do it, Teeta. Those boys suffer enough from repressing their feelings and hiding them from each other and struggling to live together. They don`t need anything extra. Not Kyle butting in and getting himself head over heels in love with Uri or anyone else. Please!

Waiting for next chapter! Take your time but try to hurry! (does that make sense? LOL )

Great chapter Teeta! Wonderful development of the story. Keep up the great work!

yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes

and I like Kyle....
nobody else does (not even you I think for you gave him an awfull name), so I decided to do it.....

So everyone back off and leave my Kyley-baby alone.....he's confused and only half way out of denial.....
and get's some action into the story....
don't get that wrong: the story proceeds slowly, but that's what makes it so realistic and I just love it this way....
but kyle acting now happens at exactly the right time....
I mean we just cleared most of the Uri-Shawn problems and now something else needs to happen, otherwise they're just gonna be stuck.....they won't jump at each other within the next few chapters and...pheewww.....it would be too fast and would end the story (unless you wanna write 20 chapters of uri-shawn lemons and nothing else).....
so I like the turn the story takes....
wasn't exactly unespected, but nevertheless cool.....
just thought there would be more rane....
ha....rane confuses me....

anyway.....I'm gonna go and plaster the street with "love kyle" posters....

keep on writing teeta, I love it

p.s.: and if you would be so kind to ignore the previous review

Thank You, Thank You, Thank You... Yesterday I came back home from shopping, so I had some tasty food, and found next chapter of Your story. Ahh... In moments like that I really love life. But...
H-How... How could Y-You... stop it in moment like that?! I'm going to cry. It's Your foult. But seriously, I really want to know what will happen next. Is Uri going to be raped? Please, don't be busy anymore. Uh, and about Uri being girly... I meant that he is girly, but only physically. I think that he is smart-ass.

Wow... so obvious aren't they? And yet Uri is just now getting the barest of hints. And what was with that kiss at the end? Gross much? Some weird sort of punishment or something?