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I was just stopping by- checking for an update. =D (Please do update soon!)

The kissing sequence was cute, and hilarious, so obviously about Shawn. I wonder if Rane will manage to take Uri’s mind of Shawn for a while. I would like them to date. Uri would be protected from Kyle, and I think his friends will be supportive when they find out. I think Rane sounds just right for him, they’d make a great couple.

This will also bring excellent opportunity for Shawn torture when Uri confesses to him that he is gay, and has a boyfriend! Shawn will be so jealous! But when he sees Uri ‘s happy with Rane he will have to let go… so sad… He’ll be depressed for sure but he’ll tell Uri he’s fine.

If Uri ever finds out about Shawn’s secret feelings for him my money would still be on Shawn though. *ponders* I guess you can take the story anywhere from here, so I’m really curious what you come up with.

Gosh... I was reading this story for two hours and 't was a real pleasure but... WHY? Why a cliffhanger just now? That's not fair. I'll be glad to read the rest of the story, it's very nice written. And Rane's quiet a good match for Uri, isn't?

hello there! this is my first time reviewing for 'not supposed to'. i swear i read this story straight for 2 days only giving time for sleep. i can't believe you're torturing me like this, not letting uri and shawn get together for 18 chapters! you're so evil ;__; but i digress...when rane asked uri to be his boyfriend i thought i was going to die from a blissful heart attack! one side of my mind said "no! he's supposed to like shawn!" then the other said "but uri deserves a little love, finally!" so i am at a cross roads. so please hurry with the story! please! now if you'll excuse me, i need some sleep to catch up on =P

omg.....this story gets better and better! awwww! uri seems to be so kawaii!!! PLease update soon!

this was a very interesting chapter...and he probably is gay (I want him to be!) and i'm glad to hear that he has a nice ass too! ^_^

Here are some things i thought i should point out to you in the third chapter.

"Probably I will study something else, more practical" … - should be - I will probably study something else more practical... ( took out the comma as well)

“Uriel, what happened that you go by bus?” -should be - "why are you going by bus?" (this way, it already implies that she wants to know what happened, and it sounds more natural to say)

“Don’t worry, my pal, we will tell him the first thing we meet him,” - should be - "Don't worry, my pal, when we meet (or you could use "see" instead of meet) him, it'll be the first thing we tell him."

I and Dan had to DRAG you - should be - "Dan and I had to DRAG you"

Uri, even I and Dan sometimes thought - again, should be "Uri, even Dan and I sometimes thought

all like waiting for the perfect girl - should be "as if waiting for the perfect girl"

I never noticed any of what Nate is talking about. - should be - I never noticed anything that Nate was talking about

The revelation Nate fed me, makes me feel a bit uncomfortable - should have no comma! it should be - ...Nate fed me makes me feel...


I hope this helps. ^_^
till next time,
Damon

Yes! Say Yes, Uri! Let sweet Rane help you to get your thoughts off your problems for a while...

I love Rane and I never hated cliffhangers so much!
Plus, I now have the problem that I can't decide which pairing I like better. Rane and Uri seems much less complicated than Uri and Shawn, but don't the brothers belong together? Again, I like the idea of Rane giving Uri that special (second) first kiss, the way he dreamed about it... And some time later, it should be Shawn's turn. Don't they both have green eyes?

Keep up the great work, you got me addicted to this story!
Nediar

WHAT THE HELL!!??!!???????Nice chapter! Ya know, in the back of my mind I thought how hot it would be if rane made a move on uri....but you totally shocked me on that one! O K! lets see what happens next!!! lol cant wait!!!

On the one hand I felt even more sorry for Uri because his already complicated situation became even more twisted having to handle not only his infatuation for Shawn and biased schoolmates but now a stalker and a very interested Rane too. On the other hand scenes like when he fought off Kyle, when imagining his perfect first kiss his partner turned out to be Shawn despite all his precautions to think of someone else or when Rane revealed is intention were also humorous. The plot is always so imaginative as well as imaginable and vividly written. I love it and can't wait to read what happens next. Thank you for your nice comment.

I’m not surprised about Rane, but I didn’t expect him to be so blunt.
I don’t like Rane. I don’t know why. Maybe ‘cos his voice is nasal…is that a valid reason? He feels off. I don’t trust him.
I’m glad Uri has someone to talk to now though. Poor Uri. You’re so cruel to him, to Shawn, to all of us; but I still love you.
Just so you know, I can wait for the smut; I can def-in-ite-ly wait. But would it be too much to have some man-hugs in there somewhere? Just simple hugs? I crave it so.
Uri’s inner workings are so funny. Even when’s he’s trying not to think about Shawn, it all comes back to him. I can’t help but wonder though if their first kiss is gonna be anything like that.
Keep writing!