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for Vacation House

by Hather

person ree
schedule November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OH MY (bleeping) GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT...was sooo HOTT!!!
person Jaquard
schedule November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
One word: paragraphs!
I read snatches of the piece, but the lack of paragraphs ultimately scuttles this.
schedule November 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
An interesting perpective its sort of first person but then it isn't hmmm. Anyway I enjoyed reading this a lot but Paragraphs would have been nice. Keep up the good work