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November 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nicely done. Serves the bugger right.
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June 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank you. I had wanted the description of the child to be as cliche as possible.
I wanted her to be someone that immediately sprang to mind and was easily
pictured by anyone who read the story. Ive found that if you can get your readers
to picture a character clearly empathy soon follows.
Thanks for reviewing.
DF
I wanted her to be someone that immediately sprang to mind and was easily
pictured by anyone who read the story. Ive found that if you can get your readers
to picture a character clearly empathy soon follows.
Thanks for reviewing.
DF
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June 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please don't think less of me for saying this, but--this was beautiful. funny, atmospheric, and well written. The only problems i had were saying "a unusual" rather than "an unusual" and the descriptions of the child almost dipping into cliche, but i'm not afraid to tell you that your writing style is MUCH more readable than a lot of the stuff i've seen on this database. i laughed my ass off and enjoyed it much; thank you.
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April 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This was creepy and very twisted. Really interesting XD. You should write more about Milo, it's an interesting character ^^
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
My god! That was... I loved it! It flowed well, it was sick in every aspect, and I loved it! Loved it loved it loved it! Of course the... sex was erm... Not expected. Or at least I didn't think it'd be a child. I knew where you were going when you said funeral parlor and stuff. I like this and how that bastard got what was coming to him! I hope you write more stories on Milo.~ *hearts* He's interesting.
~Ooky-chan>
~Ooky-chan>
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December 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
lol. pwned.
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November 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow I loved it. It was creepy.
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this is PRICELESS ... i'm in stitches!
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October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
cool.
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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe this only has one review. I know the story is supposed to be horror, but I couldn't help but giggle while reading the whole thing. Especially the 'bitch slapped into hell' part. I had been thinking the whole time that he would get caught by rigor mortis or something; but him dying at the end was even better.