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for If I Knew Then....

by Mya416

person katzies
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I feel like I've been waiting soo long.... I'm never dissapointed though. sorry about your foot by the way.
person k
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was hot! I can't wait for the next part. Update soon!
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Black Nothingness took over? Sheesh.

Is Martin submitted or not? Somehow, I suspect he has a few more games of his own to play...
person Kawanee
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh for god sakes!!!!!

Let them FUCK and enjoy it ALREADY!!! I can TOTALLY feel Martin's pain dammit!
*takes a deep breath*
ok... I'm ok now, sorry. Really though, don't you think Martin deserves a LITTLE pleasure? didn't Lord Asshole tell him it would be good and enjoyable if he submitted?
person BlackOpal
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry, I know what I'm doing with them :) Trust me the sex was/will be good :) (Rest assured, Bram just lost a little control....much to what will be Martin's advantage when this new person shows up )
person Anon
schedule March 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
H.O.T
person Mitts
schedule March 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mitts

FIGHT! FIGHT! FIGHT! FIGHT!

Reminds me of my days in the playground, lol...
Aw come on Martin, you can do better than that!
And...marking Bram?...What were you thinking? Although, knowing Martin...He wasn't!!! lmao

Sorry to hear about your broken foot...but then, I suppose the good thing is..You're not likely to be running off anywhere in a hurry..so you'll be able to work more on the story! Yay...lol
person Kawanee
schedule March 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awwww sorry about your foot.
Did you get some good pain meds?

Update soon?!

You know I love this story!! I can't believe Martin challenged Lord Asshole.. (sorry drew a blank for a second)
Hope you feel better soon! ~Kawanee
schedule March 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You broke your foot? While sparring?

One of the best excuses I ever heard. And you still turned out a great - almost whole - chapter.

Poor Bram - just everybody challenging him...
person k
schedule March 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You take this seriously but beraking your foot to emphazise with your figures seems pretty much to me :-)
I like the chapter thus far. If it wouldn't end the story too soon (In my opinion you can go on writing forever.) I'd say - BEAT HIM, MARTIN!

Good luck for your exams! (I'm with you, doing the same prep-stuff over here.) BTW your German is good, don't worry about the fluency - it's nothing we expect from German students anymore. Most of the time it's like: "Subject - attribute - object. At least try to talk in whole sentences. Verbs please!"