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Hoo hoo! That chapter was just packed with action! I really thought old Cokrain was going to rape her before she got away. What an introduction to the hero of the story, too! Thank goodness Minna was so quick with that hoodled cloak, too, -- her hair is just so distinctive. (And it was clever of her to cover up with the cloak she found in the coach before going to the door.) Poor old Hank is really going to be in for it now, isn't he?

awesome story, i enjoyed reading it.

Just finished chapter 5. Very nice! I liked the way Chloe covered for her with Cokrain by telling him she was sick. And it was clever of her to pinch her cheeks when she heard him in the hall so she'd look feverish. You did have Naomi call Chloe "Minna" once. Cokrain is just such a villain -- now we find out he did away with his old butler. I like Breagan's father. Nice little bit of reminiscing they were doing about Breagan's mother. It's really looking good so far!

I really liked chapter four! Cokrain explained how it had come to be 2 years before he got her. Chloe is a gret character - I loved the way she told Naomi to keep her eyes on him. LOL!! He wasted no time in letting her know she belongs to him. But, I thought he would be more upset and/or worried when Jess came in and he realized she would be able to connect the kidnapping/selling of foreign women to him. Just goes to show you what a nasty character he is. I wonder if she will ask him if/when he is planning to marry her? and will the locks on the doors keep him out?

I see you lost no time in letting Breagan see her -- almost the same minute Caldwell did, thank goodness. What a welcome to the country! I am still wondering if Caldwell really plans to marry her since he and his man keep calling her "his woman," not "his fiancee." Poor girl is getting sick, too. I wonder how her first day and night in her new home will go?

Interesting chapter. I do wonder about the two year lapse here, though. I thought Rufus was supposed to give her up at the end of the year? And did he actually want her for his bride? (Guess I'll find out as I read on, huh? LOL!!) The incident with the man outside showed some of her spirit and strength. I'm gald to see tht Caldwell isn't the hero of the story -- Breagan sounds MUCH better. I like the way you introduced him and his situation. You were able to tell a lot about him in just that one chapter. And I like the way you connected him through his work to Caldwell. Nice job!

this is really great but there's one thing that bugged me in one of the chapters. in it, you have Naomi say that she has just arrived that morning from england but from the other chapters you can see that she's been in the country for at least a few days. other than that, i have no beef with this and i can't wait to read the rest of the story.
yours truly,
cope

I'd sadly forgotten about this story and the sequel that was suppose to happen. I hope you're writing the sequel cause I definitely want to read it.

Just read the first chapter -- it reads like a professional novel!! I like your setting and the brief introduction and look you gave into the early events of Naomi's life that are setting up the story to come. I really loved the tidbit about Jolie and her baby, as well as the suspicion that Rufus had started the fire in the first place. This looks good!

hey i liked the story alot. hope to read more from u soon