rate_review Reviews

cute. the story line progresses nicely. your grammar is good. very nice for a newbie. Welcome to the site. enjoy your stay and update soon. I'm looking forward to it.

*adios*
~WR

very nice, a very nice promising start! can't wait for more.

awwww!!!!!

Your writing style is great and sounds so professional. This is one of the best stories i've read so far and can't wait for an update.

me like me like me like! it's definitely going somewhere. I can't wait to find out some history.

CHAPTER 2
Hi, kuroi_envoy , Welcome to AFF! We need more good writers around here and it seems that you can write well. I like Hold Me a lot. Good story line and it is easy to read. Good attention to detail, particularly when Evan is dieing in front of strangers door and feeling resentment towards them and then blocking the door, wanting to inconvenience those people. It is just so human and truly makes the character to come alive. One thing I would like is more of description, so far Evan is scrawnee with curly hair and I can't visualize him well. Overall It is really good. Thank you for writing, envoy, and post more chapters soon.