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for Hold Me

by MoonEnvoy

person omg
schedule October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i loved that!!!! i can't wait to see what happens next!!
person SODA
schedule October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This gets better and better evey second! I cant wait till Evan and Alex hook up.
There so cute together! Great chapter, update soon please!!!
person Ultra
schedule October 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Cute story! Update soon, I want to know what happens next!
person dut
schedule October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WA~ Evan is in danger! I wanna know who is that guy! Update soon ne? My curiosity is killing me.. is Alex gonna come to the rescue?!
person SODA
schedule October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Whoes the person? I got to know! Great chapter,update soon please!!!!!
person kikaria
schedule October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
waaa???? i wanna know what happens!!!
person Lee
schedule October 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story so far, your writing is really great. The only constructive critism I have is that sometimes your dialogue is a little stiff and sounds kind of forced, maybe you could try to loosen it up a bit, ya know? Make them sound like the young adults they are. Other then that your story is one magnificent! Can't wait for the next update!
person Jaide
schedule October 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story!! Evan's naiveté concerning Alex was somewhat dissconcerting. Hmmm....will they hook up? Update, pretty please? I'll give you a hug!
person dut
schedule October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ha ha ha.... so cute~ Alex swung that way from the start! more more!
person Jenna T.
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3 - AWWW! THIS IS SOOOO CUTE so far!!! The cutest story I've read in a while. I'm sooo glad I clicked on this!