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October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god!! this is so awsome, down to the point and just so...so...gah! E-mail me when you update with chapter 7!
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WEE!!! Missa love this story... I really do! I hate Ashley though. Actually I hate everyone, except Aki, in Shoji's family and something tells me that I'm going to hate them even more...
Anyway, keep up the good work...
-Milana-
Anyway, keep up the good work...
-Milana-
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 5
Hey, Jemima . OMG, Shoji belonges to Fat Bastard now! Gross. I loved this chapter. Does Shoji really owes two hundred thousand? Just how long does a person have to be a sex slave to work that off? Hopefully not indefinetly, eww. Next chapter soon, please.
Hey, Jemima . OMG, Shoji belonges to Fat Bastard now! Gross. I loved this chapter. Does Shoji really owes two hundred thousand? Just how long does a person have to be a sex slave to work that off? Hopefully not indefinetly, eww. Next chapter soon, please.
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 4
Hey, Jemima , 2 more chapters wow! how sweet:)I love where this story is going. The scene where Shoji is asking sleeping Aki to forgive him is very romantic. I sort of worried that those drug dealers Shoji is affraid of were IN THE HOUSE. How did they get in, is there any alarm system or Shoji just let them in? Overall we had a lot of action happening in last 2 chapters, very nice. One thing I could do without is poetry, though. I like 'Everything About You ' a lot, good song, but many people don't or won't in a few years. I'll tell you honestly that usually I would just scroll down poetry without reading it. Just my 2 cents. Well, waiting for chapter 5 now, poetry or not, geee...
Hey, Jemima , 2 more chapters wow! how sweet:)I love where this story is going. The scene where Shoji is asking sleeping Aki to forgive him is very romantic. I sort of worried that those drug dealers Shoji is affraid of were IN THE HOUSE. How did they get in, is there any alarm system or Shoji just let them in? Overall we had a lot of action happening in last 2 chapters, very nice. One thing I could do without is poetry, though. I like 'Everything About You ' a lot, good song, but many people don't or won't in a few years. I'll tell you honestly that usually I would just scroll down poetry without reading it. Just my 2 cents. Well, waiting for chapter 5 now, poetry or not, geee...
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September 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 2
Cool chapter, Jemima. Shoji is not really dead, is he? He better not be or the story would be over! I like The One a lot. Next chapter soon, please;)
Cool chapter, Jemima. Shoji is not really dead, is he? He better not be or the story would be over! I like The One a lot. Next chapter soon, please;)
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September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Congradulations on 1st posting, Jemima and welcome! The One is pretty good and sweet. I do love both Shoji and Aki , but would like to know more about Aki, what does he look like? Wish Shoji tormented Aki a bit before giving in, though, gee... Oh and you might consider doublespacing between paragraths a bit more. Overall this is pretty good, I hope to see next chapter soon, thank you, Jemima.
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September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome! I loved it! Pleaseee make more ^^
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September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
love it sooo much!!!!! ashley what a piece of work!!
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September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg!!!! THis is awsome more more more pwease ^-^ and get in some smexy seens