rate_review Reviews

excellent story, i love how it flows and how descriptive it is. it feels almost like i'm there. the setting is great and my only question is: what happened next? definitely keep writing.....

"Pulling her tight he softly kissed her shoulder he softly moaned in her ear, “That was amazing.” Nuzzling against her soft skin, she softly smiles turning to look at him, softly kissing his lips, “Thank you” is all she says before curling beside him, slowly falling asleep."

I noticed that this part is told in present-tense, while almost the entire rest of the story is told in past tense. You may want to just fix that up, eh?

Also, the last sentence is kind of like that, too.

But overall, good story! :]

good story.