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October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
So far so good. Keep it up
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September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey wait,Did you rip this off from "The Craving"?
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yup he screwed up, they always do...
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September 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh goody!! Hmm, I wonder where he plans to move and if this will have any affect on the plans for his next victum. That's pretty cool that he's doing a variety, but what I like to know is how he knew her name and age already.
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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is extremely good. Your writing is very good.
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September 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
k first off i find it extremely immature how u dedicated a whole chapter on bashing someone who was only trying to help you improve on you're writing. A real writer takes criticism and actually learns from it. That's what differenciates writers that will succeed with the writers that just won't. No offense.
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September 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter...I can't wait to find out how he messed up.
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September 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey that was a better sex scene. Hehe. I am guessing it was your intention to make it seem fast pase, not just the rape scene.
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September 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Although the short chaptors are an anoyance, you're doing pretty dang good with the story. I can't wait for him to rape his own sister.
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September 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Seems a bit odd that he'd arive home RIGHT after the rapist leaves. Same for when he leaves and right afterwards the rapist jumps her. Just seems to close, and he might be caught doing something like that. Also, isn't it possible for his cum to be traced back to him?