rate_review Reviews

Yay!!! you finally updated! I am so happy... Oh just to let you know.. I am one of your prvious reviewers by the name of 'dut'.... Glad to hear that the next chapter is comin up!

so sorry to hear about your comp woes. I really liked the story and just wanted to let you knwo that you had me riveted.

Of course I will still here for the next chapters !! I like your story so far... Can't wait for the next chapter!

hey lovely story plot the characters r too good plz complete this story cant bear the suspense..

Aha nice story. I like where it's going, so keep it up. But I noticed a few errors, and I wasn't going to say anything at first but what the hell, I have time. And I know what it's like writing everything out by hand (a lot of cramping and hard to read hand-writing!)

"You're scarred, aren't you?"- scarred=scared (unless you mean like "scarred for life" which I don't think you do)
But weather Mark was being childish or if he really believed those things, it didn't matter.- weather=whether
The only thing that cut the heavy silence was the sound of their heavy breathing, of witch Marks sounded very close to Keiichi's face.- witch=which and Marks=Mark's
In fact, the whole café had stopped taking and was looking at him.-taking= talking

I think I might have noticed something else, but I forgot what, so I guess it's not too important. Other than these small errors, cause everyone's allowed a few mistakes here and there, you're writing is great.

ohhh...this story is really cool! I like it alot and would like to see where it is going and where it ends up! Please add another chapter and I hope you have returned to your original skin color ^^

I really like your story so far. It’s realistic and well written. I’ll be looking forward to read more.

Yes, this could get very interesting ! Very good beginning... More please...

Hi, Shinju. Just finished reading 1st chapter and very pleased with it. I love school slash stories and good ones are hard to find. This looks promissing. Really well written for the first Original story (I also did read that little rant you posted half year ago, hope you found a better job. I don't count rants as real stories though.) Your English is real good and plot is interesting. I would like a bit more info on characters- a way they look, dress etc. Just to make it easier to visualise them. I can't really 'see' Keiichi's face, is he 100% Japaneese looking or part? It would be cool if he had some special talent, maybe not school related (how about him being fantasy writer, posting fiction on internet, he,he,he). I am glad that you decided to write the Original story, because I only read Original and HP slash. Thank you for writing, Shinju.

wow! This is so~ interestring! I wanna know more!