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January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
your tense are a little funny, and you had way too many "ahh!"s. Try a little variation.
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September 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
very VERY nice.
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked this fic; I love the kinkyness of it all but the tiger should've fucked her or the princess like willing to give the tiger a suck, that would've been so much more steamier.
I was tired of hearing the princess say "AHH" in her moans after the third time she said it; she's human, she should've like reacted a little more 'hungry' toward the tiger.
but the ending was a bit cliche; but iguess since she's a princess, she has to be shown as weak and vunerable i guess.
ah but do write more :D
I was tired of hearing the princess say "AHH" in her moans after the third time she said it; she's human, she should've like reacted a little more 'hungry' toward the tiger.
but the ending was a bit cliche; but iguess since she's a princess, she has to be shown as weak and vunerable i guess.
ah but do write more :D
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Whoa!! Interesting For originality... I give ya a ten out of ten.
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yeah, I must agree. That, "Ahh," thing was total crap. =| I couldn't focus on the actual erotica because all I saw was, "AHH, AHH, AHHHH!" Descriptions of her moaning, a varied sound. The writing is good, just...work on that.