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February 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow...not bad. It's too long to read in one sit-down, but I'll definitely come back for more. Keep it up.
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January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm on chapter eight at the moment, and I have to say that I like the story thus far. I think all of your characters are unique and I definitely look forward to seeing how each of them interact with the maze! :)
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December 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What a fantastic story...with so many plots and twists...
I am a little sad though, that Roxy had to die...after she fought so bravely too...
And Ilona too...what's going to become of her daugher?...And was she afraid of Dralnu when she left her baby with Helen?...Or did she fear Daray?
Very, very good...I enjoyed it immensely!
I am a little sad though, that Roxy had to die...after she fought so bravely too...
And Ilona too...what's going to become of her daugher?...And was she afraid of Dralnu when she left her baby with Helen?...Or did she fear Daray?
Very, very good...I enjoyed it immensely!
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December 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey is their going to be a part II?
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December 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked this!
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I am sorry to see talented writing like this recieve fewer reviews than the humber of chapters; even short chapters! Here, Perhaps I can help. I am halfway done and plan on finishing.
I would first of all like to say that while your writing was a cut above the internet benchmark, I was not able to enjoy this story sexually because of the emphasis on hard non-con, though the fact that it's written by a female made it less scary in that way. I liked the way you put the reader in the carious places, in the psyches, of your young victims and let their overwhelmed, confused feelings, but I though the transition from fear and pain to sexual arousal was too jarring. Unless there's some magic rape-feels-good curse in this maze, it just seems... I dunno, wrong. You could have set it up so that these young women were the sort for whom a mized fear/pleasure reaction would make sense, and Hope certainly is such a person; her character and her reactions really makes sense... but the other four seem forced at times, especially Nanaia. Her sexual repression and frustration needed to be more apparent beforehand for her enjoyment of the demon rape to make sense. However, let me say it is refreshing to see such balls-out fearless boldness in a female author; to see a female writing deep, dark, hentai-style pressure porn. You impress me even as you make me cringe; take it as a compliment that the writer is good enough that the reader feels torn and fears/hopes that author is in a merciful mood in each chapter. Sigh... why is it all the GOOD writers do psychologically tortured darkfic or yaoi, or both?
I would first of all like to say that while your writing was a cut above the internet benchmark, I was not able to enjoy this story sexually because of the emphasis on hard non-con, though the fact that it's written by a female made it less scary in that way. I liked the way you put the reader in the carious places, in the psyches, of your young victims and let their overwhelmed, confused feelings, but I though the transition from fear and pain to sexual arousal was too jarring. Unless there's some magic rape-feels-good curse in this maze, it just seems... I dunno, wrong. You could have set it up so that these young women were the sort for whom a mized fear/pleasure reaction would make sense, and Hope certainly is such a person; her character and her reactions really makes sense... but the other four seem forced at times, especially Nanaia. Her sexual repression and frustration needed to be more apparent beforehand for her enjoyment of the demon rape to make sense. However, let me say it is refreshing to see such balls-out fearless boldness in a female author; to see a female writing deep, dark, hentai-style pressure porn. You impress me even as you make me cringe; take it as a compliment that the writer is good enough that the reader feels torn and fears/hopes that author is in a merciful mood in each chapter. Sigh... why is it all the GOOD writers do psychologically tortured darkfic or yaoi, or both?
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September 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
In general, I loved your story. Great writing with a few hiccups here and there. Although I haven't read any of your other fics I can only assume that they are as good as this one is. It's a shame that you're done writing it, I felt that you could have drawn out the maze just a little bit more. Anyway, overall I have to say that I was impressed. Good Job :)
~Katie
~Katie
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September 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOW!! That was a great story!! I can't wait for the next one!! Hehe
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September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Love it love it.
Especially you've been reversing everyone's character.
It would be good if Eldora had some magical powers to control minds.
Especially you've been reversing everyone's character.
It would be good if Eldora had some magical powers to control minds.
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September 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay. So. Way to leave a girl hanging. I'm now dying to know what happens to everyone. I'm sad Roxy isn't going to be the one who gets out. I liked her best. And Nania (did I spell that right?) was probably my second favorite. Anyway. You need to finish this soon and post the end. Because I really do want to know what happens to them all. What the girls who are going to be trapped's lives will be like. I really like that everything is his game. Not just the maze but the entire continent.
Well, I should go. Update soon.
Katie
Well, I should go. Update soon.
Katie