AFF Fiction Portal

rate_review Reviews

for The Reluctant Master

by NeoTerra

schedule December 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, I finished reading the last three chapters, and I must say, Em, that I'm VERY impressed.

I might have seen a couple of grammar slip-ups, but that's beside the point. Your writing was beautiful and artistic.

This story was a blast. Keep up your work!
person swiss miss
schedule October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL! OMG, I'M LOVING THIS STORY SOOOOO MUCH! you absolutely MUST write more!
person Kitt3n
schedule October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I am so impressed. I love it. It's one of the few stories out there that are really everything I want :-) please please keep writing!!
person Niteshade
schedule October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OH MY CATHOLIC, MORMON, VIRGIN EYES!?!!!

But damn... what can I say dude?

This is a good story, a real good story. For a fiction on S&M this is actually quite tasteful. It had me glued to the pages... but not in that way.. yeah.

Main point is, just keep writing, I wanna see how you get this guy out of this situation.
person Marty
schedule October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think this Story is really cool! The guy isn't some super-sadistic otaku, but a realistic guy whose doing what he can to make his girlfriend happy. I can really respect that. The cliffie at the end of Ch. 3 is really interesting, and I'm shivering to read more.
person Fenrir
schedule October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, very nice third chapter. But there was no lemon on this one, which was kind of disappointing, but I figure the extreme bondage and trics helped. Good story keep writing.
person inu
schedule October 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really liked it.
person ano-sama
schedule September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOLOLOOLOLOLOLOLLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLLLLLL!!!! XPPPPP Sorry about laughing that, but my guy friend's name happens to be Ryan, not to mention his OC is also named Ryan. =3 See, I have a OC named Angela, and we like to roleplay with them all the time. (They're a couple.)The thing that I found funny about this, is that you completely and wonderfully captured both Ryans' personalities. (the feeling of your character being arkward and confused and new at S&M XPPP) I got to reading halfway when I realized how much this reminded of them. Lololol! :D
person ano-sama
schedule September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wellllll I read the second chapter and I must say, bravo! =3 I admit that the whole S&M in this second chapter, isn't my friend's thing, (he prefers to be keep it clean) so I'm glad your characters are different, (cuz I might think the wrong thoughts and get scared the next time my friend and I roleplay XP)
schedule September 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I just read Chapter One...

I love it already. I'm into the whole S&M thing, and damn if that girl didn't have me hooked.

Spanking is one thing. A total smackdown, well...that's kinda where I draw the line.

In any event, keep up the good work!