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this story is getting so good can't wait to find out what happens next thank you for writing, nona

I like Danny. Who is Erik???
Boy, Danny sure is jealous.

I totally understand how she was feeling when they had their little family moment.. I really hope that Danny is jelous.. and will he remember erik? I think the guys name is.. because if he does and he is jelous ... well he could go right up to anne and put his arm around her being strangly possesive.. which he has never really felt because well he has never really been jelous when it comes to his girl of the moment.

Please post more... Love ur story even more... :)

Your writing itself is very good, I approve of the use of big words that you don't normally see in places like this. I can't decide if I like the fact that you used the name Dostoyevsky, as an avid reader of Russian literature myself. I'm having a bit of a problem with the fact that these very important Russian people have names like Daniel and Theodore. Doesn't sound very Russian to me. Also, I understand that this is a romance story, so liberties are to be taken, but people should still act like people, I believe. Why, knowing that the man she woke up beside is the rightful resident of the bed, not to mention the apartment, would the girl refuse to give up her identity? I should think she'd want to explain herself if only to avoid being arrested for tresspassing and/or breaking and entering.

I think this story has potential, I'm enjoying the story itself, and your style is very pleasing, but I think it could use a few tweaks.

This story is awesome, it could use some editing, but it is still great. Mostly I love the originality of it and it is sweet. I can't wait for the next chapter, send me a notice when you post please.

I love this.
Keep going!

Ashleigh.

Incredible! I'm loving it! More please?!

well you could have the daughter go back to russia.. when parents said that they wanted them to come back they ment for a visit.. but not at the same time because someone needs to stay and take care of the house and it might cause suspition if two kids about the same age as their 'dead' or 'missing' children suddenly show up. Danny has classes so he cant go so the sister desides that she will go but what about her house guest?? well she talks to her brother telling him everything and that she has no where to go.. and she cant be left alone incase the uncle finds her she needs someone to be there with her.. they start to talk they start to like each other but what they dont know is that her uncle has been following her and just waiting for the right time.. which is right after they fall for each other and admit it to each other .. he beats her to a bloody pulp puts her in the hospital in a coma they dont know if she is going to make it... blah blah blah WOW ok there is my idea you odviously dont have to use it but if you want to go ahead cant wait for the next update.

YAY. I'm always eager to help :)