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July 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh this is fabulous...I do hope Ralph finds some love too, if it is Julia, I hope she captures his whole heart and not just a part of it. I have my suspicions that Hank's grandfather was in love with Rachel's father all those years ago but I could be wrong. Lovely lovely story!
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June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hiii finaly got done reading it great story :).
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June 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Good to see more of the characters come out, especially Mark. Definitely sounds like ex-Nazis to me. Its good to see some teenage problems too, I had similar problems at school and college.
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June 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. The idea of an Oedipus Complex in someone is quite disturbing. I can hardly wait to see who that "Psyciatrist" is. I have a fairly good idea who it might be, but I ain't saying :D . To imagine that he seemed to have so much power over someone like that. This story is definitely getting quite dark and mysterious.
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June 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just read Chapter 7, and that was very dramatic. I used to know a teacher at school who was a bit of a flirt with some of the girls, which was a bit disturbing, though he never went far, just winking at girls. I hope the guy in your story gets whats coming to him.
Very good so far, waiting for the next installment. Ralph is shaping up to be my favourite character so far.
Very good so far, waiting for the next installment. Ralph is shaping up to be my favourite character so far.
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May 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just read the final chapter, and this is certainly going somewhere. I can't wait for the next installment - bring it on :D
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you have me hooked. When is the next chapter coming along? That was quite deep, very moving. I printed it out to read at home.
MLC (a.k.a. Jake Bullet)
MLC (a.k.a. Jake Bullet)
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Another good chapter. Keep 'em coming :D
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I read the first chapter, you tell a story well but you haven't made me interested in the characters.
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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ch 1---
Well, it definately has me curious. It makes me want to know exactly what made the dead guy so bad that he would kill others to prove a point to another. I will continue reading it tomorrow and let you know what I think when I get to the last posted chapter.
Kind of interesting ... We are both aspiring authors. I don't have any of my own novel posted here, though. I'm not quite that trusting. Have you ever tried www.writing.com? You can try out their free service, or buy their extended better service. They have several options on it and it is a safe place to display your work. It even gives you the option of passwording your work where only the people you give the code to can see it. Anyway, I use them. I have my fanfictions with them, plus a piece of my own precious novel. You might check them out. You can display your work and request reviews and lots of writers use it, and they wgive honest opinions...
Shiloh
Well, it definately has me curious. It makes me want to know exactly what made the dead guy so bad that he would kill others to prove a point to another. I will continue reading it tomorrow and let you know what I think when I get to the last posted chapter.
Kind of interesting ... We are both aspiring authors. I don't have any of my own novel posted here, though. I'm not quite that trusting. Have you ever tried www.writing.com? You can try out their free service, or buy their extended better service. They have several options on it and it is a safe place to display your work. It even gives you the option of passwording your work where only the people you give the code to can see it. Anyway, I use them. I have my fanfictions with them, plus a piece of my own precious novel. You might check them out. You can display your work and request reviews and lots of writers use it, and they wgive honest opinions...
Shiloh