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January 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
I am just to chapter 3 of your story so far, but I wanted to comment on how much I am enjoying it! The last chapter with Eric and Elena using and riding her was very arousing indeed! I also write M/F BDSM as well, and I always love to stumble onto wonderful nuggets like your story. Makes my whole day better! Keep up the great work and I am going back to reading your story.
I also wanted to let you know, that you did great work in writing in the first person POV. I know that it can be a difficult thing to do, but you mastered it well. :)
Warmly,
Kanashii
I am just to chapter 3 of your story so far, but I wanted to comment on how much I am enjoying it! The last chapter with Eric and Elena using and riding her was very arousing indeed! I also write M/F BDSM as well, and I always love to stumble onto wonderful nuggets like your story. Makes my whole day better! Keep up the great work and I am going back to reading your story.
I also wanted to let you know, that you did great work in writing in the first person POV. I know that it can be a difficult thing to do, but you mastered it well. :)
Warmly,
Kanashii
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January 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well I finished your story and I really liked it. Honestly I was kinda more turned on by the dark father and the intimidating bodyguard...Mmmmm. Now there is a kinky thought! James seems a little too "meek" for her.
(Why does he remind me of AJ From the Soprano's?? LOL!)
I admit the switching of perspectives from first person POV to third person was kind of 'jarring' in the middle of the story, but it is alright. The nice thing about 3rd person is you can get more details to the readers that way, but my humble suggestion as a fellow author and writer is I wouldn't switch perspectives in mid-stream Other than that I really liked this and look forward to your updates. Who knows? Maybe that dark bodyguard and his intimidating father will get hold of her yet and take her down a few pegs. ;)
Warmly,
Kanashii
(Why does he remind me of AJ From the Soprano's?? LOL!)
I admit the switching of perspectives from first person POV to third person was kind of 'jarring' in the middle of the story, but it is alright. The nice thing about 3rd person is you can get more details to the readers that way, but my humble suggestion as a fellow author and writer is I wouldn't switch perspectives in mid-stream
Warmly,
Kanashii
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December 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Slave stories aren't necessarily my favorite thing, but I'm glad you reviewed my story so I could find yours. It's extremely hot, for the most part, and I look forward to whatever you have in store.
For my money, the training scenes with Eric and Elena were some of the hottest BDSM sex I've read recently. I'd love to see more of that.
For my money, the training scenes with Eric and Elena were some of the hottest BDSM sex I've read recently. I'd love to see more of that.
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August 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was very very good keep going and post soon
bye bye
bye bye
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August 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was very very goodkeep going and post soon
bye bye
bye bye
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was very very good keep going and post soon
bye bye
bye bye
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July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Got my attention. Very hot.
Write more soon!
Write more soon!
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July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I am so enthralled with this story. It is so amazing. Please keep reading, I need to know what happens! I am totally in love with Eric and the Ds elements. Thanks for writing1 <3
~Kitt3n
~Kitt3n
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July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting story you have here. I am hoping on seeing more from you soon. I want to know more. I like how your first chapter isnt the beggining and how the rest of the story starting from chapter 2 is kind of like a flashback. You have a lot of talent and im reallyy looking forward on seeing more.
good luck ~tanya.
good luck ~tanya.