rate_review Reviews

I lurv ur story soooooo much. i really like the story line. pleeeeeeeeeze update soon.

Wicked story! Loves it! So, when are you going to post chapter 8?
If you need a Beta, just email me!
*Bites'n'Nibbles*

...me likey >=9

please continue the story when you can. i just have to know what happens to the 3 of them. please

wow

Yeah ! A new chapter... Beautiful !! I love your story ! Can't wait for the next...

Ok, it's generally a good story, although could do with a few tweaks. Sometimes it's hard to follow because you keep switching between first and third person. Write it all in one or all in other, it's really the best thing you can do.

Some spelling mistakes, don't forget to use spell check! I advise getting a beta reader, as they can pick up on things you miss and check for readability. You're the writer, you know what you want it to say, but the reader doesn't always, hence beta readering awesomeness. ;)

And I agree with Psycho Duck here, whilst we like smut, and you do write good smut which is important, you do need more then just that. But then again, your last line in chapter 5 hints at plot development.

Plot development makes Emily happy. It keeps the nice men in white coats away. :) But yes, in onclusion, good story, hope you update soon, plot development and more smut please!

Wow, I'm hooked. Will she ever get away again. Just read chapter 5, I think she give in a little to easily, but nice ending. Did not except him to say that. Can't want for next chapter.

This had alot of potential but your horrible spelling mistakes ruin it. Just proofread proofread proofread. And try to get spell checker for the words your not sure about.

please keep going!