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Ok, here I am reviewing this story, after I just started reading last night and finally finished still hungry for more. I love the characters and even though I like vampires, it's almost like the story doesn't really need them. I am sure, you will put them to very good use later on, but I still think a story just about the two of them would have been fine. I know, there are ardent fans of the two among your readers, so I apologize to them. I think the last chapter is great. I always like men that can't express themselves and here we have two, even though one of them talks a lot. I felt in a way it is time for Drake to be the one to show a little more emotion or try to go after his princess instead of being followed himself. I know, he is the one that has more trouble with this relationship, but maybe in the future he can actually go after him. Anyway, the smut was great again. I don't mind it so close together after you made me wait for so many chapters already. Not that I'm saying every chapter needs extensive stuff, I've seen a couple of stories like that and it gets really boring, since there is hardly any plot left and you really don't want to read it. Good stories have been butchered that way. Yet in this situation the whole make-up sex was warranted. I mean since they don't say what they want or how they feel, there seems to be hardly any other way of showing it. Also it's a good way to get the vampire angry! Anyway, I wonder where this is going. I have been wondering for a while, if Drake is actually going to his hometown and I am looking forward to what their actual destination is (if any). I have one question though, that other vampire Rsomething (sorry, I am sooooo bad with names and I just read his name probably 1/2 hour ago) was he by any chance out during the day???? I thought that they can't be out during the day, but either I didn't read it right (if that's the case sorry), but when Drake meets him in the village wasn't that daytime? Or is he different from others or was he wearing a cloak or something??? I know this is already a chapter back, but I was just wondering. Anyway, I love the story, its humor and characters and hope to read more soon.

DAMMIT! A cliffie!!!

Wicked little cliffhanger! Will our lovers be reconciled? Or will Drake continue being a stubborn ass?

Poor Drake. I actually feel quite sorry for him, despite his idiotic attempt to abandon Teige. Your ability to make readers feel sympathy for a character, even when he's behaving in a way that we don't approve of, is a strong indication of your writing skill. Anyway, as foolish as I find his actions, it would be impossible to believe that someone like Drake could easily settle into any sort of intimate relationship, much less a homosexual one. And he did have the decency to leave Teige a horse and over half of the supplies, so that makes his flight a bit more forgivable.

There were several strong descriptive passages in this chapter. When Teige collapses in the snow after being abandoned by Drake, you really made me see and feel that. It's hard to believe you don't have any firsthand experience with real snow! And later, your description of the abandoned village, with the sun hitting it like "a luminous glow outside a crystal ball" -- that was creepy and beautiful at the same time.

And the bit toward the end, when he starts to talk to his horse, that completely made me chuckle. “I’m talking to a horse…” Stallion snorted indignantly. “…a very…important…horse.” LOL!

Can't wait to read the next bit!

Love,
Falcon

“Don’t worry…keep running all you like…but in the end he’ll catch you…because you don’t really want to escape, do you?”
BWAHAHAHAA !!! I KNEW IT !!! ... Teige really rules his seme XD I so easily picture him with black-leather cloths : a minishort, cuissardes, and a little top which cover only chest, holding a whips, and at his feet Davinoff, Raspel and Cyprien nude and kneeling to lick his boot XD. So-picture-it.
Anyway, aaaaangst *_____* ANGST IS MY GOD !! *o* Poor Teige and Drake... But that's so good XD And, anyway, we want 'em to deserve their happy hand, don't they ? No. End. "happy hand" is for single bishonen. Or for mutual masturbation. Whatever. Nothing to do with an end. ... Where was I, again ? @___@
Hollyday ? I write HOLLYday ? >___> <___< >__< AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGGGGGGHHHH
*try to find a good pretext* B-B-But it's because I'm going on a trip to visit church and... and other religious things ! So it's really *holly*day XD *read again this lame playword* >__> I think it was better without explanation finally...
Raspel and Cyprien in priest... Errr... Like in Hellsing ? XD Yeah, Raspel is a priest and Cyprien a nun ! *picture the scene* *collaspe drooling* A... nun... With... Black carry-jarretelle...
Cyprien : *sob*
Teige : *pat his back while humming conforting words* Here, here... You will escape.... You will escape... *take on his arms like a mother his child* Here...
Raspel+Drake : EYH ! And us ? >___<
Teige *kick away* GO AWAY, YOU BARBARIAN !!!
Raspel : +__+
Drake : And it's US the barbarian o__O *awake Raspek with clouts* WAKE UUUUUUP
Raspel : No mommy, not the cucumber, not the cucumber... *wape up* Huh ? Wazzup ? *see Teige petting Cyprien* The traitor !
Drake : 'Think he found the way to soften Teige...
Raspel : Yeah... To seduce uke, ALWAYS play on their maternal instinct.
Drake : You seriously think I will ever cry like that ? 'm not gay, me !
Raspel : That was you were shagging with him, and why he's not hugging Cyprien >__>
Drake : *cry*

Finally! About damn time Drake realized what he really wanted. Hot and sweet, the perfect combination. Very well done ^-^ Hopefully a certain two vampires don't make any trouble for the now happy little couple. (Yeah, like that's not going to happen)

OMG!! That was ... that was beautiful and sexy and so, so hot. I can't even find the words. Just the first kiss alone made me melt. I found myself holding my breath more than once. Very, very well done. Your descriptions are paint and canvas in the hands of an artist. I should be taking notes, lol. Can't wait to see what happens in the morning.

Very, very, very nice!

I love the way you develop the intimacy between these two characters -- the way that they share their secrets, and their souls, before sharing their bodies. It gives the lovemaking a very powerful tenderness. There were several really sweet moments during that bit, like when Drake was worried about not being as skilled as Cyprien, and Teige assured him that he had nothing to live up to. And I loved the way you stretched out the whole sex scene, giving us lots of kisses and caresses before the actual "act". I think a nice, slow buildup is the sexiest thing in the world.

As always, some nice bits of humor. Poor Teige, mistaken for a female by the girl of his dreams! I couldn't help smiling a bit when I read that, even though I felt bad for him. Also, Drake's endless belts were funny, too.

And you did a great job fixing up a lot of the veiwpoint issues that I mentioned.

The language is this chapter was so lush and lovely, I couldn't pick out a single favorite phrase. So here's my top three (in no particular order):

"Teige’s eyes had fallen shut, dark feathery crescents staining his rapidly heating cheeks..."

"...capturing petal soft lips in his own, savoring the feel like the first taste of sweet honey before a feast."

"...stretching his gleaming body like a pagan sacrifice below and displaying him for none but himself to see, reflections of the dying embers dancing over the beaded droplets on his skin and shimmering like tiny gems..."

I can't wait to see what happens next!

Love,
Falcon

Yo! I really liked this chappie! ;) the old man seemed odd, like he *knew* something. (>.<)

Great new chapter!

I love the way Drake and Teige's relationship continues to develop. Their conversation during the dagger lessons seemed really natural. I know that you're concerned about showing more of Drake's dark past, but I want to assure you that everything you've told us so far comes across as very believable, and very appropriate for the character. Sure, most characters in fiction have a tortured history, but it's not cliche' -- it's just that a tortured history is often what drives people to be extraordinary, and extraordinary characters are the most interesting to read about.

Also, I really enjoyed your descriptions of their travel. You made me feel like the characters were actually moving through a real place, with real terrain and real weather. "Snow crunched beneath Teige’s feet, the cold seeping through the thick, water-resistant skins of his boots and chilling him to the bone regardless of how much cover he packed on the outside. Each step felt like breaking through brittle glass..." Brr! That description made me shiver -- and that's not an easy thing to do during a Texas summer. Drake's concern about Teige being cold was a sweet little moment.

The discovery of the not-quite abandoned cabin was interesting. I can't make up my mind if all is as it seems, or if you might have something more planned. Nice dialect with the old man. I pride myself in writing good dialogue, but I absolutely can not do dialects. I appreciated the way you included smells in your description of the place: "...dust, old pine sap, and fermented whiskey..." Sensory details other than sight really help evoke a setting.

Can't wait for Chapter Fourteen!

Love,
Falcon

Man the more I read this story the more I like. You've developed both Drake and Teige wonderfully they're extremely likable, Drake not being as cold as I thought he would be and Teige having far more fire than I thought he might have. This is now my favorite story on the entire site. I look foward to your updates. ^_^