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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
(damn touch enter... -_-)MAKE OUT IN FRONT OF CELIBATARIANS ???
Drake+Teige : No ^___^
Teige *show Cyprien* He's here. You know what you have to do.
Cyprien : ... It's for the captivity, isn't it ?
Teige : Yes ^___^
Raspel *jump on Cyprien* Libido rules us all !
And my translator give me "carry-jarretelle" for "porte-jaretelle" O_O The most wonderful creation of man since book... Maybe garter, yeah...
Drake+Teige : No ^___^
Teige *show Cyprien* He's here. You know what you have to do.
Cyprien : ... It's for the captivity, isn't it ?
Teige : Yes ^___^
Raspel *jump on Cyprien* Libido rules us all !
And my translator give me "carry-jarretelle" for "porte-jaretelle" O_O The most wonderful creation of man since book... Maybe garter, yeah...
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July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, so far, so good on me reviewing, eh?
I loved this chapter. It felt way too short. Cyprien is so eloquent, I actually felt pity for him, for a moment, then he said he'd kill Drake and all pity went out the window. Beautifully written, absolutely stunning imagery.
I know what you mean about seeing it unfold in your head. That's what takes me so long to write - I'll suddenly blink, and realize I've been watching the show in my head, instead of writing it down, lol. Anyway, great chapter, I'm dying to read more, and I'm glad things are finally settling down for you
Thanks a bunch, *hugs*
Katica
I loved this chapter. It felt way too short. Cyprien is so eloquent, I actually felt pity for him, for a moment, then he said he'd kill Drake and all pity went out the window. Beautifully written, absolutely stunning imagery.
I know what you mean about seeing it unfold in your head. That's what takes me so long to write - I'll suddenly blink, and realize I've been watching the show in my head, instead of writing it down, lol. Anyway, great chapter, I'm dying to read more, and I'm glad things are finally settling down for you
Thanks a bunch, *hugs*
Katica
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July 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Raspel is Drake's brother?! I so did not see that one coming. Good twist though. Poor Cyprien. I think he's really gone and done it now. He's going to have to die. A shame, but you just can't steal another man's bishie without suffering the consequences, no? I'm sure the next chapter will be very intense. Can't wait.
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July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God. I am just in awe of your writing talent, and I think you've quite easily made it into my top two favorite authors on this site. (Camaro being the other.) Jesus, where did you learn how to write like that? I'm so fucking impresed. I read story after story hoping to fall upon something of this caliber, and this is the first time I have in at least a year. Just fucking WOW.
The biggest wonderment I have with the story is the development of the characters. You make them real and so familiar to the readers, and that is a rare talent only given to the best of authors like Steinbeck and Poe. You've taken the old style of fairly vague description and twisted with a style of your own, making th most amazing erotic story I've ever read.
Favorite character? Most definitely Drake. Not only is he big and gruff, but he has a heart, and he reminds me of the kind of man I might fall in love with...well...if I liked men at this point. *snicker* His development was excellent, and I loved the sexual tension right up to the lemon. The entire time, I was squirming in my chair thinking to myself, "Geeze...just hurry up already." When they finally 'hurried up,' I was like... AHHHHHH!!!!!! Then I had to take a cold shower afterwards. It was the most beautiful lemon I've ever read. Anyways, I'll be reviewing your other works on here. Bravo, and thank you so much for the read. We're honored that you're here!
The biggest wonderment I have with the story is the development of the characters. You make them real and so familiar to the readers, and that is a rare talent only given to the best of authors like Steinbeck and Poe. You've taken the old style of fairly vague description and twisted with a style of your own, making th most amazing erotic story I've ever read.
Favorite character? Most definitely Drake. Not only is he big and gruff, but he has a heart, and he reminds me of the kind of man I might fall in love with...well...if I liked men at this point. *snicker* His development was excellent, and I loved the sexual tension right up to the lemon. The entire time, I was squirming in my chair thinking to myself, "Geeze...just hurry up already." When they finally 'hurried up,' I was like... AHHHHHH!!!!!! Then I had to take a cold shower afterwards. It was the most beautiful lemon I've ever read. Anyways, I'll be reviewing your other works on here. Bravo, and thank you so much for the read. We're honored that you're here!
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July 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Update! *Does happy update dance*
Okay, I definately did not see that coming, but now that you mention it, I can see the family resemblance. Oh, I hope Cyprien doesn't do too much to Teige before Drake can rescue him. Looking forward to the final confrontation, and to more smut (gotta get it somewhere, since it's not in my story, lol) Thanks for reviewing and please don't leave us waiting too long!
Katica
Okay, I definately did not see that coming, but now that you mention it, I can see the family resemblance. Oh, I hope Cyprien doesn't do too much to Teige before Drake can rescue him. Looking forward to the final confrontation, and to more smut (gotta get it somewhere, since it's not in my story, lol) Thanks for reviewing and please don't leave us waiting too long!
Katica
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July 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great new chapter!
The beginning of this chapter really adds a lot of depth and -- dare I say it? -- humanity to Cyprien's character. I really felt for him when he was standing outside the cave, unable to understand why Teige would choose a brief time with Drake rather than an eternity with him. I guess, in that moment, he kind of reminded me of Kale, convinced that possession/obession is the same thing as love.
Action scenes are always difficult to write, and a action scene where the viewpoint character has trouble seeing is even trickier. I'm quite impressed that you managed to pull this off with so much clarity. You provided so many sensory details beyond vision that I felt like I was right there, standing with Drake in the darkness, straining to hear the slightest sound. Very exciting and suspenseful!
And I adored this little exchange between Raspel and Drake:
"And you are?”
“In a bad mood."
Too funny! It's nice to see that Drake won't let anything keep him from being his adorably gruff self, not even a vampire.
The twist at the end really suprised me! The good type of surprise, where I shout "Aha! I should have seen that coming, but I didn't." I love it when an author manages to be more clever than I am. (Okay, I know that initially you didn't see it coming either, but I still think it was a brilliant piece of inspiration on your part. It makes Raspel more that Cyprien's tag-along, and gives Drake even more emotional issues to deal with regarding vampires.)
More! Soon!
Love,
Falcon
The beginning of this chapter really adds a lot of depth and -- dare I say it? -- humanity to Cyprien's character. I really felt for him when he was standing outside the cave, unable to understand why Teige would choose a brief time with Drake rather than an eternity with him. I guess, in that moment, he kind of reminded me of Kale, convinced that possession/obession is the same thing as love.
Action scenes are always difficult to write, and a action scene where the viewpoint character has trouble seeing is even trickier. I'm quite impressed that you managed to pull this off with so much clarity. You provided so many sensory details beyond vision that I felt like I was right there, standing with Drake in the darkness, straining to hear the slightest sound. Very exciting and suspenseful!
And I adored this little exchange between Raspel and Drake:
"And you are?”
“In a bad mood."
Too funny! It's nice to see that Drake won't let anything keep him from being his adorably gruff self, not even a vampire.
The twist at the end really suprised me! The good type of surprise, where I shout "Aha! I should have seen that coming, but I didn't." I love it when an author manages to be more clever than I am. (Okay, I know that initially you didn't see it coming either, but I still think it was a brilliant piece of inspiration on your part. It makes Raspel more that Cyprien's tag-along, and gives Drake even more emotional issues to deal with regarding vampires.)
More! Soon!
Love,
Falcon
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July 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Whew, and here I was worried that you'd have posted like a dozen chapters while I was being lazy and not reading anything *LOL* Anyway, sorry I'm late on reviewing, but better late than never? No? I loved this chapter. You know that I like eveything all happy-happy, but a little angst really made this relationship believable. Now, if only you could let the two vamps keep each other distracted so that our happy coulple can live happily ever after it would be perfect *LOL* Can't wait to see what your boys get up to next. This chapter was beautifully written. I loved "White Rabbit", you know I did, but you've grown so much since then that it's scary. You continue to amaze me, keep it up ^-^
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July 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sure. Ooh! This was a hottie, LOL!
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July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awww. This was one of those chapters that gives me the warm fuzzies. The initial akwardness between them made the sex all the more sweet and heartwarming. Okay, I admit that your lovely descriptions also warmed a few other regions of my body, too. *Wink* Very hot and erotic stuff.
I totally cracked up when Teige told Drake that he followed him in order to offer protection. It sounds hilarious, but there's also an element of truth to it. Drake does need a sort of protecting -- mostly from his own negative thoughts -- and Teige is just the one to do it.
And I loved this image: "Finally, swallowing his pride with the ease of consuming a hornets’ nest..." It's original, vivid, and it really says something about Drake. Also, it's a nice bit of dry wit.
But now Cyprien is really pissed off, and that can't be good. Didn't Shakespeare once write: "Hell hath no fury like a vampire scorned"? (Okay, maybe he didn't say EXACTLY that, but I've always felt that his plays would be greatly improved by the inclusion of a few vampires. *Wink*)
Anyway, can't wait for the next bit!
Love,
Falcon
I totally cracked up when Teige told Drake that he followed him in order to offer protection. It sounds hilarious, but there's also an element of truth to it. Drake does need a sort of protecting -- mostly from his own negative thoughts -- and Teige is just the one to do it.
And I loved this image: "Finally, swallowing his pride with the ease of consuming a hornets’ nest..." It's original, vivid, and it really says something about Drake. Also, it's a nice bit of dry wit.
But now Cyprien is really pissed off, and that can't be good. Didn't Shakespeare once write: "Hell hath no fury like a vampire scorned"? (Okay, maybe he didn't say EXACTLY that, but I've always felt that his plays would be greatly improved by the inclusion of a few vampires. *Wink*)
Anyway, can't wait for the next bit!
Love,
Falcon
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July 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yes, update! I've been checking every day. I'm sorry things haven't been going so good *hugs you*
I don't think it's too soon for another *ahem* intimate encounter, especially after Drake rode off and left poor Teige all alone with the pony. They had to have some passionate make-up/ I-won't-ever-leave-you-again sex. I think these two characters are just wonderful. There's nothing like seeing a big, strong man's man type guy trying to come to terms with his sexuality, and you show that just beautifully. I adore them both.
Please, please update soon! I'm dying to see what horrible thing that vampire has in store for the lovers.
Katica
I don't think it's too soon for another *ahem* intimate encounter, especially after Drake rode off and left poor Teige all alone with the pony. They had to have some passionate make-up/ I-won't-ever-leave-you-again sex. I think these two characters are just wonderful. There's nothing like seeing a big, strong man's man type guy trying to come to terms with his sexuality, and you show that just beautifully. I adore them both.
Please, please update soon! I'm dying to see what horrible thing that vampire has in store for the lovers.
Katica