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NYAH ! YOU'RE BACK !
Oooooh, pooooor Cyprien T_T True, he's a bit of unlucky... A little little bit XD You really managed to make him.. I don't know exactly how to say that... pitiful maybe ? You would want to hug him and comfort him... That's too sad...
But in fact, I'm not CRUEL toward him.
It's just that when I love a character, I love to see him suffering *____*
Cyprien : o_O You means that I must go singing and laughing everywhere to get off of you ?...
Corenn : But WHY would you want to get off of me ? Am I not niiice ? ¤_¤
All : >__> Sad...
And, anyway, it's good to see a "deep" characters... Evil villains, OK, perfect, but "human" too. Not like my T-shirt, which has no human feeling. No, I'm not lying !! It's WRITING on it ! >__<
... OK, no spleeping at 3:30 following by showing a leg at 9:00. Very bad for brain. Must stop.
Anyway, for the fanfics - they're very difficult to read, I think. There's expressions, and I normally use many... how could I say that... "litterary" frensh. Difficult words, etc. Or else you allow me to give you frensh lessons XD
And I also made some drawing explaining the true reason of why Cyprien left Teige to Drake, who Teige really love and one Raspel-diggin'-his-own-grave thing. *sighs* The stuff you do when you're bored... >__>
Nyah. And there I end this reveiw to go back crying on poor Cyprien.
Drake : Offers him some garter to cheer him up ! He sooo love garters and wheels ! You'll be sure to light up his mood ^___^
Cyprien : ... You're quite the rancorous, aren't you ?

Normally I do not go to original fiction, simply because my time seemed to always be taken up by other categories. I found myself with a bit of extra time yesterday and decided to delve into this one. The title peaked my interest and for some very long hours, that was all she wrote. I am totally fascinated by this fiction of yours and am waiting with baited breath on the next installment. I'm not sure how often you update but hope it's not long inbetween as I am dying to know what's going to happen next. I have fallen in love with all the characters. Cyprian is just what I would imagine of a centuries old vampire and love the way you seem to choose his words with such care. Having lived so long he would have to be intelligent and I enjoy how carefully he speaks. I think it quite ironic that his cold and callous nature that keeps him alive is also what is going to kill him in the end. I felt his pain upon knowing that Teige loves Drake but feel that he must die in the end since I want my lovers to know happiness and as long as he's there such a thing cannot be. You know, if you ever wanted to do another follow up to this, Cyprian's background would also make a very intriguing tale too. No, didn't see Raspel being Drakes brother coming at all. Very nice twist though and would make perfect sense. Makes for a much more intersesting story and I must admit to wondering how in blue blazes my lovers would ever escape Cyprian. Which brings me to my lovers. What wonderful, believable characters these are. Drake as the handsome, rugged warrior is just perfect. From the begining his actions suited his personality like a glove. His dealings with Teige, the way he had trouble dealing with him rang so true that it was almost like reading a true story rather than fiction. The whole way through this I kept thinking what an awesome movie or TV series this would make. Maybe one day I'll actually see it happen. (a girl can dream, can't she?) Now Teige. I love him. From the first, when we are introduced to the lonely sad boy that he was to the young man we see him growing into I fell totally in love with him. To see him finally becoming brave enough to fight for what HE wants and not just settle for what he has to is so moving. You write so eloquently that it's a joy to just sit and read your words. I can see the images as I'm reading and almost feel like I'm right there as it happens. Not many people are able to do that and I'm feeling blessed that I happened to find this story. I cannot wait for more. Thanks so very much for sharing it with us.

OMG you totally can't do this to me! -pouts- You have a definate knack for cliffhanger endings. As usual, beautifully written, intense, and had me on the edge of my seat. I swear, I stopped breathing when Cyprien bit Tiege. I can't wait to see how you pull a happy ending out of this, because right now, I'm worried. Drake is the hero - he would die for the one he loved, and vamprism is usually an instinctual thing, driving the fledgling to feed against his will (not sure if that's how it works in your story, but hey, just speculating here XP), but I just know you're not cruel enough to let Cyprien have his way. The vampire must die and Drake and Tiege live happily ever after. That's how fairy tales work, dammit! -deep breath, calm down-

Wow, sorry to hear about the hurricane and everything. -Hugs- Hope things get better soon and I'm glad you're back. It was definately worth the wait.

Katica

Hmmmm, I wonder how Drake and Teige are going to get out of this one? You wouldn't be so cruel as to kill Teige, now would you? No, you would never be so mean as to kill a lead character... right? Anyway, you're back, I'm back, and I can't wait to see how this fic ends up. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I'm hoping for a happy ending, but I see so many ways for this to end in heartache. Update soon, please?

Hurray! You updated! *Does the Happy Dance*

It's been so long since I did the beta thing for this chapter, reading it again was like getting to read it for the first time. I can't remember exactly what I nitpicked in my critique, but whatever problems there were, you definitely fixed them. The viewpoint is handled smoothly and clearly.

One of the most interesting things in this chapter is the way you show Teige becoming more self-aware regarding his relationship with Cyprien. In Chapter One, Teige seems to think of Cyprien as a force of nature -- the great and powerful captor. But in this chapter, for the first time, Teige begins to view Cyprien as a person. And begins to realize that the reason he can't be happy with Cyprien doesn't really have anything to do with the fact that Cyprien is a vampire, or that Cyprien kidnapped him and used him to lure people to their deaths. It has more to do with the fact that Cyprien is cold, dispassionate, and ultimately uninterested in the truth of who Teige is. (When Teige thinks Cyprien is going to ask him about how he changed, and instead Cyprien only comments about Teige's shorter hair -- that's a truly masterful moment. So much information is conveyed without saying it. Teige wants to communicate something about his inner life, and Cyprien only cares about the exterior.)

The bite was gloriously erotic, and terrifying at the same time. "Dazed, Teige felt the unmistakable liquid warmth of blood seeping down languidly from his abused neck to the bare expanse of his chest...the vampire... pressing a gentle, measured kiss to the small lesion he’d created before mimicking the act with timed precision down the dark crimson trail that followed." So sensual and evocative. Just gorgeous, really.

And I loved it when Teige said he half expected Cyprien to give him a dress. That totally cracked me up.

I'm sorry to hear about the hurricane and everything. I wish that I had any sort of legitimate excuse. But I'm going to try to follow your good example and drag my ass through the last 1,000 words of Chapter Seven of "With A Spirit Of Love." Until then...

Love,
Falcon

Chapter 19 review -

I truly think this has to be the best chapter of anything I've ever read. The wording is superb. You've totally captured the angst of each character.

I'm just in awe!

Gosh! this chapter was really good! You should send it to bishonenplease[at]yahoo.com and see what happens.

Oh, and now it makes me want Cyprien to get Teige... crap... I really want THEM to be together... I don't know why.

And I like the touch with Raspel. I kinda figured he was Drake's brother in the beginning.

-le gasp- I've just read through your story and thus far, it has been brilliant! I love it all! Can't wait till the next ... And to think, there's still that crazy elven-queen lady to deal with, at least, that's what I figured because of her last threat.

I say, just to solve all matters, Cyperian (I know I spelled that wrong, lol) Teige and Drake should just all get together and do the naughty ^^ Yeahhh -drools-


Great job! you got me hooked!


Sekre

Oh Cyprien, Cyprien, Cyprien... You almost had me feeling sorry for him in this chapter. When he talks about how Teige makes him feel the sunlight, and fills his days with meaning, I really experienced the strength of his longing. Teige's response -- about how he would have given himself to Cyprien, if only Cyprien had spoken of his feelings earlier -- was also quite heartbreaking, revealing that Cyprien once had a chance for happiness, which he has now forever lost. But then Cyprien said he was going to kill Drake, and no one messes with my man Drake (growls protectively) so I'm afraid that Cyprien must be dealt with. Pemanently.

You mentioned that you take extra care when writing Cyprien's dialogue, and I wanted to say that your efforts pay off particularly well in this chapter. His speeches are not only eloquent, as befits his character, but there's also a touch of the archaic to them, a lingering trace of all the long years that he's lived through.

You've set up such a wicked, angsty delima for Teige: kill Drake or die himself. And even refusing to drink from Drake won't necessarily save his lover. I see the possibility of lots of lovely emotional turmoil in coming chapters.

Absolutely adored this line: "Smooth fingers, unmarred by time and age, cascaded down his cheek with the grace of a morning fog, startling the smaller figure into a sharp intake of breath; he’d forgotten how gentle the vampire was, and how cold." The comparison to fog was really original, and the whole sentence was so evocative that it made me shiver.

Anyway, great job, as always! Can't wait for the next bit!

Love,
Falcon

I'M BACK !!!
Eyh, in fact of happy holy... holly... hooli... RHAAAAAAAAAH in fact of happy journey in Little Brittain... This was pure hell, my friend (I say "my friend" because I spent my time listening to Rhapsody and Korn - and, after too much Rhapsody, you begin to call the ones you speak with "my friend" or "mighty warrior". The other fans will understand me.). I missed Cyprien and Raspel and Drake and Teige soooo much T___T Even the RaspelXCyprien lemon and the two threesome that I wrote didn't divert me T___T It was horrible...
And I KNEW they were brothers ! XD Gruffy, seme-like... Bro-thers. I want to see a rape of Cyprien last days, I don't know why O__O Maybe the call-for-raping description of him that you put everywhere... Yeah, a rape with many men taking him by force and [all censored]... *day-dream*
Cyprien *gets white (Er... Even more white than usual, I mean...)* *choke something looking like "I see that Liyttle Brittain didn't make your enthousiasm fade" and run away*
Corenn : Buuuuut T____T What did I say ?
Drake+Teige+Raspel *bath into very cold water with red cheeks* No... thing...
Teige *thought* *jump on Drake* *[censored] (yes, the crazy censorerhas followed me here...)*
Raspel : CAN'T YOU STOP TO M