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please continue I Love the story very much please put more Chapters in the story very Soon I beg you pretty please the story is wonderful and awesome and cool and please put more Chapters in the story asap.

love the sstory! please update soon!!

I really really truely love this story!
It is so well written and so well composed!
I love the characters and how you narrate the story!

Please update! *begs*

wow i love this fic . your very very talented. one can only wish to be as talented a writer as you. please update soon

When are you planning to update? I am so addicted to this sotry, it\'s amazing. :)

Simply Amazing. I think I\'ve become addicted to the story. Keep up the awsome work and add me to that update e-mail list ASAP!!

OMG! THis is such an awesome story. I love it!! You make it sound so real. And so romantic, as if you could put yourself in their positions. The way you represent each character is just great, yet you give them a common ground to move from. Where he has a weakness she is his strength and vice versus. Please continue to update. I really enjoyed your story. I\'ve included my e-mail too. So please if you could e-mail me when you update I would greatly appreciate it.

Wow! Great story, Lucky. You\'ve developed two very interesting characters here. I really like that you\'ve taken time to develop a plot. When do you plan to write the next installment? I can\'t wait to read. As far as critiquing goes, you\'re story is pretty creative. I don\'t think I\'ve ever read anything in quite the same vein. Which authors inspired you? As a suggestion, I would recommend including a little background about this world you\'ve written. It\'s very interesting, but we only catch a hint of it now and then. I get the impression it\'s post-apocalyptic earth, but I\'d like to know more about the customs or language, laws, etc. There are inns and gum-chewing cafeteria ladies, lol, intriguing. Do they have technology? I don\'t recommend launching into an essay about the world or anything but maybe just dropping a few clues here and there. Like lanterns or lamps, etc.? You may have mentioned this and I missed it. >.o I do that. Also, the characters are well developed, but as they say, you can never too much character development. You described Alek\'s hair (I like), but what about his eyes? And Kari? Maybe you can tell us a little more about Kari\'s teacher and her relationship with him. They seem to have a history. I\'m really interested to see Alek\'s brother. Is he a crazed lunatic, sadistic, etc? I notice a few times you repeat dialogue too, but that\'s probably a result of stopping and then writing again, lol. It happens. Well, that\'s all my -too many- suggestions for now, lol, just ideas to help the readers visualize the story. Great stuff so far, and looking forward to reading more! =)

I just love updations! I hope your weeks are getting better, I been having a busy one myself , but to the review.Awesome chapter, I like the intilectual thoughts in there. I myself have thought of stuff like that. Good to see someone else thinking of it. I also like how you have a plot to all of this nd its not just mindless sex. Im not saying mindless sex is bad I just mean I love plots in there with them ^^, it makes it more human. Good job once again my friend and keep up the good work! ^^

I\'m glad your taking your time with this story, you do have a life outside of writing. ^_^ Alek and Kari just them being together brings a smile on my face. I love to read the changes in them both, they complement each other. I hope that their journey brings together even more. great chapter!!!