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August 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If this story makes it to a book i'd be interested in buying it, it's great. Keep goin!
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it was so nice to find that you had added more. I love these characters and the way you write them--this is one of my favorite stories. I know real life can intefer with a writer's muse but I hope you find time to add more soon.
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh yesh! An Update!
Great chapater.
Like always XD
Great chapater.
Like always XD
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*tries unsuccessfully to force word past the lump of emotions in her throat for a couple of minutes, gives up, and settles for applauding wildly instead*
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 17 review -
Such a sensual chapter - with such a dark ending... And poor Lark making another multitude of mistakes.
Sincerely hope Chapter 18 is in the works and almost ready to be posted!
Such a sensual chapter - with such a dark ending... And poor Lark making another multitude of mistakes.
Sincerely hope Chapter 18 is in the works and almost ready to be posted!
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
"Uh oh, here comes the altar part." ROTFL! Ahh...priceless. -wicked grin- Actually, there were a lot of little parts like that that I really enjoyed in this chapter. In fact, the very beginning in fact had me grinning from ear to ear. Somehow, regardless of how majicky-powerful he is...I can still picture Sactaren perfectly as he lifts his head at Lark's call and promptly bangs it on a table. The image of him looking not-quite-so-mighty covered in cobwebs was just lovely too... And Lark was picking them out! Whaha! Lol.
One hundred and thrity-seven years old. Wow. Naeven's really making a cradle-robber out of himself with Lark, then, isn't he? ^^ Still, I don't care how old he is, he's still sexy as hell... The years might even do somethin' for him, you know? If nothing else, wisdom and experience come with time, right? -smirk- I don't know whether I mentioned it when you first breeched the subject, but I think the idea of lust powering his magic is very fitting. But you didn't just say it was lust and leave it at that...you gave it a reason, that it needed to draw off of 'strong emotions', and that too makes perfect sense. Very cool. Still, I can't imagine anyone that would want to work their magic off of grief or rage when they could just do lust. I mean come on. Who doesn't want to work with the seventh sin? -snark- Muaahhahaha! Phht.
Also, I noticed Lark is calling his master 'M'lord' again, except when things start going wrong. When he starts getting panicked and going on instinct, Sactaren becomes Naeven, and I find that very, very sweet. And a large improvement, too! I take it to mean that somewhere, deep down in there, he really does see the man as 'Naeven', but his formal training after a lifetime of slavery has just ingrained the use of the more distant term until the habit's hard to break. Still, it's progress, it's progress!! I still think the alter comment is hilarious...
"You broke it!" Made me laugh out loud, and then I had to feel kind of sorry for Lark. He seems able to do just about everything wrong without meaning to and then whenever he tries to get stuff right...he messes it up worse! ^^ Still, I found it funny when Sactaren was snapping at him, telling him not to appologize because it made him impossible to stay mad at. Cuteness. -muchlove-
And then, and then! The high magic. o_o Ah! Another display of Lark going beserkly with worry and resorting to using 'Naeven'. Two in one day! Very nice. Awwww...and the whole thing was so sweet too. Lark getting all protective and helpless and... And I was very happy to hear that Sactaren could hear him. ^^ Makes it all so much better... Nyah.
Bwah! Well, looky here...as usual, I've managed to ramble on for eternity! But mostly because this chapter was teh uber awesome, cha? -nod,nod- Looking forward to the next one with great impatience!
-Moonstar
One hundred and thrity-seven years old. Wow. Naeven's really making a cradle-robber out of himself with Lark, then, isn't he? ^^ Still, I don't care how old he is, he's still sexy as hell... The years might even do somethin' for him, you know? If nothing else, wisdom and experience come with time, right? -smirk- I don't know whether I mentioned it when you first breeched the subject, but I think the idea of lust powering his magic is very fitting. But you didn't just say it was lust and leave it at that...you gave it a reason, that it needed to draw off of 'strong emotions', and that too makes perfect sense. Very cool. Still, I can't imagine anyone that would want to work their magic off of grief or rage when they could just do lust. I mean come on. Who doesn't want to work with the seventh sin? -snark- Muaahhahaha! Phht.
Also, I noticed Lark is calling his master 'M'lord' again, except when things start going wrong. When he starts getting panicked and going on instinct, Sactaren becomes Naeven, and I find that very, very sweet. And a large improvement, too! I take it to mean that somewhere, deep down in there, he really does see the man as 'Naeven', but his formal training after a lifetime of slavery has just ingrained the use of the more distant term until the habit's hard to break. Still, it's progress, it's progress!! I still think the alter comment is hilarious...
"You broke it!" Made me laugh out loud, and then I had to feel kind of sorry for Lark. He seems able to do just about everything wrong without meaning to and then whenever he tries to get stuff right...he messes it up worse! ^^ Still, I found it funny when Sactaren was snapping at him, telling him not to appologize because it made him impossible to stay mad at. Cuteness. -muchlove-
And then, and then! The high magic. o_o Ah! Another display of Lark going beserkly with worry and resorting to using 'Naeven'. Two in one day! Very nice. Awwww...and the whole thing was so sweet too. Lark getting all protective and helpless and... And I was very happy to hear that Sactaren could hear him. ^^ Makes it all so much better... Nyah.
Bwah! Well, looky here...as usual, I've managed to ramble on for eternity! But mostly because this chapter was teh uber awesome, cha? -nod,nod- Looking forward to the next one with great impatience!
-Moonstar
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
BY god I love this storty so much.
You are a goddess.
And I want more of this wonderfull story.
You are a goddess.
And I want more of this wonderfull story.
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Me killing you? I would be inclined to say it's the other way around. I really would. That is, if I didn't like Naeven's outburst and Lucifer's 'dark intelligence' in this chapter too much to feel like complaining at all. I wish I could push Naeven and Lark into that lovely bedroom along with some of that 'blue stuff' and shut the door and throw away the key. I turns out I couldn't (though not out of lack of trying), so I'll just settle for waiting for the next chapter instead. Eagerly.
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July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More of Rayne and Belaeden! Yay! That pairing makes me all jittery with happiness, and it was uber cool to see Bel in action. All those tattoos....and rippling muscles and...mmmm. Yum. Loved your description of him (and of Rayne when he first came running out, nearly slipping in the mud). As always, I got such vivid mental images of everything. Absolutely scrumptuous.
If there is any one thing that I dislike more than anything else...it's how long I have to wait! Ah! I know your chapters are typically pretty long, a fact that I love, but they just never seem long enough. This whole week has been a wild and wooly mess for me. One thing and another all lined up, and right before classes come back too...but I saw this chapter up this morning, and I think I got halfway through it in what felt like no time at all. It nearly killed me to leave the computer (else I would have been late), but it was nice to come back after a long morning and finish up.
Near the beginning, Sactaren's response to the news of his 'girlfriend's' visit made me breathe a deep sigh of relief. I know Schaff said not to trust her, and she just seemed plain out crazy......but I've learned that Schaff can be very, very decieving, and I didn't want to get too confident. Still, Schaff's worry over Naeven and him using 'high magic' stuff, how he "cared about him too much to-" -fill in the blank. o_O Makes me very curious. I wonder how close Schaff and Sactaren really got.......
Anyway, yeah. Bunches of cool stuff this chapter...and could this possibly be the beginnings of a larger plot? Pretty, pretty... -crosses fingers- Can't wait to see what the tainted water is for (you know I've got that little nagging in the back of my head saying Sactaren's finally gonna be the good guy and fix the water for free buuuuttt....I may just be giving him a bit too much credit at this point. But you never know...he seems very vulnerable when it comes to Lark and his requests/bleeding heart...) I know now not to expect any 'Lark bent over a desk' scenerios any time soon...but I want to amend an earlier comment I made. Fifteen chapters is not the longest I've waited for decent sex on another person's story...I read someone's work once who made me wait twenty-five...so you have a new bench mark. But hey...so long as you keep up the great writing, I think I could wait almost forever (almost), and I get to look forward to another one of those lovely salyr a'havon curing sessions. -smirks and lips licks like a cat anticipating a canary breakfast-
Looking forward to the next chap!
-Moonstar
If there is any one thing that I dislike more than anything else...it's how long I have to wait! Ah! I know your chapters are typically pretty long, a fact that I love, but they just never seem long enough. This whole week has been a wild and wooly mess for me. One thing and another all lined up, and right before classes come back too...but I saw this chapter up this morning, and I think I got halfway through it in what felt like no time at all. It nearly killed me to leave the computer (else I would have been late), but it was nice to come back after a long morning and finish up.
Near the beginning, Sactaren's response to the news of his 'girlfriend's' visit made me breathe a deep sigh of relief. I know Schaff said not to trust her, and she just seemed plain out crazy......but I've learned that Schaff can be very, very decieving, and I didn't want to get too confident. Still, Schaff's worry over Naeven and him using 'high magic' stuff, how he "cared about him too much to-" -fill in the blank. o_O Makes me very curious. I wonder how close Schaff and Sactaren really got.......
Anyway, yeah. Bunches of cool stuff this chapter...and could this possibly be the beginnings of a larger plot? Pretty, pretty... -crosses fingers- Can't wait to see what the tainted water is for (you know I've got that little nagging in the back of my head saying Sactaren's finally gonna be the good guy and fix the water for free buuuuttt....I may just be giving him a bit too much credit at this point. But you never know...he seems very vulnerable when it comes to Lark and his requests/bleeding heart...) I know now not to expect any 'Lark bent over a desk' scenerios any time soon...but I want to amend an earlier comment I made. Fifteen chapters is not the longest I've waited for decent sex on another person's story...I read someone's work once who made me wait twenty-five...so you have a new bench mark. But hey...so long as you keep up the great writing, I think I could wait almost forever (almost), and I get to look forward to another one of those lovely salyr a'havon curing sessions. -smirks and lips licks like a cat anticipating a canary breakfast-
Looking forward to the next chap!
-Moonstar
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July 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Once A Slave is by far the best story I have ever read. I can't wait for your next story to come out. I really do fancy Lord Sactaren, everything about him is so overwhelming! Please have your next story out soon :D I'm really looking forward to it!