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February 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you need grammar help. not to much spelling, but grammar. work on it, then repost your story.
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February 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Needs more detail like what they look like, what the rooms they were in looked like, and how things felt to be more descriptive the way they're skin felt or fibric of the chair felt and so on.
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February 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story its really good and well written!!!