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ONLY TWO CHAPTERS !!!! OH HELL NO ! UPDATE!! YOU HAVE TO , MUST UPDATE OR I'LL DIE!!! PLZ PLZ UPDATE!!!

Poor Yuki! I'm glad that Matt is there for him. Please update!

*slaps matt*of course its not only crazy people that want to die. *cries*poor yuki.those horrible people that call themselves parents.

anyway,update its good so far :)
so sad though. :(

I think is a good start, I hope you contole, I want to see what happens.

Great start! I like it so far :) Though I would have suggested maybe giving a more specific description of the "friends" maybe how many there are or some names, maybe just describing briefly his closest friends, it would make it a little more real and believable (but maybe you plan to do that in later chapters, if so disregard what I said) You did an excellent job though, the writing was nice and clean, no spelling or grammar errors that I could detect when I read it. It flowed well. I hope you continue! I'd very much like to read more. ~Kisses and Chocolate~ Hannah

Hannah has a good point but I just can't see myself thinking about the description of my friends if I were going to do that, and since it is from the first person point of view it fits.

A little suggestion (just for the look of things) could you seperate your story from your memo at the top by a bit more? It would make it easier to read for bleary eyed, early morning/late night people. I honestly thought you were continuing your memo until I saw his name. -_-

And you may have put 'they' when you meant to put 'the' in the last sentence or so. *thought you'd like to know*

I love it and am looking forward to reading more!

Oh wow. Poor guy! *hugz him* Please update!!

Very good start. I'd like to see where this story goes. Feel really sorry for Yuki though, I know how he feels. )= Anyhow, hope you put up another chapter soon.