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December 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Theres no such thing as Mary-Sues in Original Fiction. Nice story.
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September 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
:D As a fan, I was really hoping she would get together with John, and I'm happy she did. ^^ I liked the origional ending as well.
You're an excellent writer, just a few typos here and there. :3 Keep up the good work. ^^ <3
You're an excellent writer, just a few typos here and there. :3 Keep up the good work. ^^ <3
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February 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really like it. It has an incredible story line and a terrific dialog. This seems alittle bit to real though and if it is i am glad that they faced it. Your characters were in depth and very good. this was incredibly written and i hope to read more of your work soon
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February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, just wanted her to end up with John
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I agree the ending was a bit anticlimactic. I understand what you were aiming for, but I think you tried to wrap it up too fast. It's a good story, it deserves more of your time and attention right to the end.
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February 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I just randomly decided to read this story of yours, and I have to say, I really liked it.
I was surprised that your writing was a lot better than I expected.
I think the ending is great, but if you do decide to alter anything, you
should re-write the end with her and John, not TJ. But I like both couplings equally.
Really, I loved the story and will make an effort to read anything else you post. ^^
Good job,
-Jenna-
I was surprised that your writing was a lot better than I expected.
I think the ending is great, but if you do decide to alter anything, you
should re-write the end with her and John, not TJ. But I like both couplings equally.
Really, I loved the story and will make an effort to read anything else you post. ^^
Good job,
-Jenna-
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February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this story is really good, but sad! it sucks that trapper got raped but i loved how john stood up for her and said all that stuff to danny at the end. update soon!
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What do I think...I Looooooooooooooooooooooooove it
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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yes, that chapter was a bit darker that the previous ones, but it was still good.
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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oooh, the drama keeps the story good! i wonder what happens to trapper and tj though? they sound like a cute couple. i hope danny gets raped or something though.