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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
are u not going to continue with this story it would be a shame b/c i reeally like what u have got so far.
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January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
He;s ordering me to sit down in my place??? That makes no sense whatsoever! Nothing in this chapter has made the whole thing any less confusing and difficult to read.
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January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
In a way i enjoyed this chapter, in a way not - your story and writing seems to be moving from one topic to another with no explanation, if any! This makes for an extremely confusing story that, slowed a bit could be great. Some reason why she's so uptight would be great, Cairo seems to be in a major huff with no reason given for it. It may be part of your story to explain later but right now, the first 2 chapters really need some, if not all of that explanation.
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
it's got a pretty interesting start i'd like to see exactly whats going on though pls update soon