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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad start. I would suggest you get a beta reader and have him or her help you with puctuation. There were times when I had to read a sentence 2-3 times to get the point. But, the sex in it is pretty hot.
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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Amazing! A well written descriptive story.
The characters were well described and potrayed!
Looking forward to many more chapters!
KEEP IT GREASY
The characters were well described and potrayed!
Looking forward to many more chapters!
KEEP IT GREASY
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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oo i liked that one a lot...
write more
write more