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August 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The plot is so good I almost forget its a smutty story xD! Your a reall good writer!
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August 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I know I already said this but VIC IS LOVE aghhh! I want him! But since he dosn't exist, I want them to get together! xD
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August 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
To the end of ch.10: ZOMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG NUUUUUUU HES TAKEN. oh well becca's probably cool too kk.
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August 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is one of my favorite stories I have ever read and I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter! It's sexual yet tasteful and has a wondeful plot I am dying to see played out. I especailly love how realistic you made your character and situations. I feel as though I am watching a movie based on true events when I read this. Again, I am thoroughly impressed!
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August 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
As usual another fantastic and thrilling chapter. Smack is turning out to be a right jackass. I am slowly beginning to want Paul and Eva to grow to like/love each other. That is if you are planning on keeping Paul in the story for longer. Please update soon!
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August 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good for her! I'm glad she had this really lovely experience with this nice, calm guy who is normal (as opposed to the weirdos and pyscho Smack). She deserves some good ol' fashioned slow lovin'.
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
@16 (again) well, I read this again. Stupid, eh? well it kind of weirded me out because Paul is my brother's name, and I kept seeing his face. I do believe my brother is possibly a lover of that sort, although I wouldn't know from personal experience. We did have a wrestling match once, but that was it. (I had to say "uncle")
The way you described how they made love was almost cathartic. Like, you don't really know there's something wrong unless something right happens and then, well, your world, it gets turned upside down, doesn't it? I mean, it's more than a love scene here. Its a growing, a maturing of a girl into a woman, a learning experience that is so profound, it will never leave her. Kind of like
A turning point.
The way you described how they made love was almost cathartic. Like, you don't really know there's something wrong unless something right happens and then, well, your world, it gets turned upside down, doesn't it? I mean, it's more than a love scene here. Its a growing, a maturing of a girl into a woman, a learning experience that is so profound, it will never leave her. Kind of like
A turning point.
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, Paul isn't supose to be with Eva. Well Maybe this wil wake Smack up for his bullshit behaviour. I think that Vic and the boys should beat the shit out of Smack so he can come to his senses. Please keep goin i love it.
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August 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this was a very very good chapter
keep going and post soon
bye bye
keep going and post soon
bye bye
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August 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i really enjoyed this chapter. everything flowed nicley and seemed natural. im curious to how this well end. 'til next time...