rate_review Reviews

Pretty cool writing. The story is nothing out of the ordinary, no real plot whatsoever. Yet it was an easy and enjoyable read (and I'm not even in to that humil thingy). You have some cool punch lines.

love it

I disagree with the reviewer above. The story does have a plot; it's about a teenager who runs away to join a band. That's the base plot. There sub plots going on too, one being that she's allowing herself to be used for sex, another that there's something between her and Vic. There is alot of sex, but it's in the erotic section, it's supposed to have lots of sex.

The style of writing is autobiograpical. These are supposed to be the memiors of this Eve girl, which explains the first person writing. For that style of writing one base plot and two sub plots is high. Real lives don't have a constant plot.

I think the story would hold up if the writer got rid of all the intense sex scenes or toned them down, then elaborated more on the scenes that happen outside the sex. If they can do that and it would still be a story, then it's got a plot.

I wouldn't like it nearly as much if the sex was gone though.

very good keep going ;)

Ok, are you an author? I mean an author that sells books and rakes in the cash? Because if not you should be. This is such a brilliant and fantastic story! It is good enough to go in shops (and its a hell of alot better than some of the rubbish I find).
I cannot wait for the next chapter! You always make it so exciting and so real.
I wish we did live in the same city!! you are such a wonderful writer! I can only wish I was half as good as you!
-kaha

Once again you have done another WONDERFUL chapter and I thank you for it, seriously! Just a suggestion again, make Eva get pregnant SOMETIME! That would definatly make me love this story at least 100 times more. Lol. I like that whole sweet sappy stuff sometimes. Anyways, please don't ever stop writing this until it's done and then do a sequal because it is that good. I'm awaiting your next chapter. Love you, Bye!

Excellent story, I look forward to reading more. Everyone thinks that it's so easy to write in the first person and it isn't. But a good writer can make it look easy and that's what you do, you make it seem easy. I think there are others on this site who are trying to copy you. Most of them are good examples of why it isn't easy to write in that style.

You are an excellent writer! Me, I'm truely honestly repelled by Girl on Girl action, but you wrote it so beautifully that I had to keep reading! And get turned on a bit myself ;) Great work! Keep It Up!

Hi, I found your story really interesting not because it's true or anything but because it IS a well written fictional story, The only reason I haven't left my email address because although I think it would be GREAT to talk to you, To many people go on my account and pretend to be me...even though I don't tell anyone my password...But that's not the point, I hope you do update this story because I find it rather interesting and well written...as I have said...I look forward to reading other chapters to this as well as reading an other stories that you have / hopefully will write.

Another great chapter! I found that bit with Pam a rather interesting part. Just seemed to fit so well and really help add to Eva's developing character.
Such a wonderful story~~ Cant wait for the next chapter!