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I was in the middle of reading your chapter, and I had a random thought. Why is it that girls will try to make the guy jealous? They've done it to me too. Maybe they think we'll go crazy or something if they see you with another guy. It makes us jealous, but I find that jealousy makes me anxious and angry more then lustful and loving.

BWAHAHAHAHAHA! Ahh this is the best one yet! I especially like the Vic/Smack conversation after the Beauty Parlor! Fucking isn't a compliment, it's a lifestyle. Classic stuff. And the vibrator! I'd love to see that go up Smack's butt. Am I devious that way? Of course, but that's the way I write. I'm so glad she didn't fuck Stealth. It seemed wrong. Well it all seems wrong, but you know...

Good job! Best chapter yet!

Peace and blessings
-The Psycho Duck

That was a great chapter, but not the best!
I love this fic! The next chapter must have some VicxEva.
I want to learn their pasts, and for them to learn eachother's pasts!
I love this story to peices, please continue to update it frequently! <333
-Jenna-

I'm almost reluctant about reviewing your story for fear of jinxing it! The last two stories here that I reviewed were shortly after dropped by their respective authors so I'm pleading you not to do so or I just might never find it in me to comment on anyone else's fictions!!! Well now on to the praise. I have to say that I really understand all the great reviews you've been getting plus the huge ammount of hits, this story is just that good. The sex scenes are very graphic but in a well-done and believable way though I wish I'd find myself a Smack (funky crotch smell aside), any guy who can keep it interesting after the gazzilionth time and make me come every single one as well can call me a slut anytime (and there goes my membership of the feminists's country club, damnit!)! I love all of the other characters as well. Eva is great, she can be so cynical and dry at times but then she says something that just makes me want to craddle her on my lap and say that everything is going to be ok. I have absolutely no illusions that she's just a little misguided girl and though I know that as we age usually we get more savvy that's not necessarily a rule and I think she's fairing way better than most 15-year olds, not that you should take it as a flame to your character development! I do get that her upbringing by a rock star was very unorthodox and that even that aside sometimes life just pushes you to mature faster and she's trying to do just that. Now regarding the whole sexual drive thing, I'm still trying to figure out if she does indeed have nymphomaniac tendencies (though there's nothing wrong with that, either in fiction or real life as far as I'm concerned as long as it is between two concenting people) or if she just has that low of a self-steem that even if unconsciously drives her to seek acceptance and compliments in that form. I thought Smack and Vic's argument was a great example of that paradox and I wish you could show us more of what she's thinking in this regard. I think she is adventurous and she isn't quite as worlly as she'd like to think (at the time not as your narrator) so she likes some of it and some she just allows to happen to her as fear of speaking up, but then sometimes she does speak up and then I'm thrown to a bit of a loop on where she stands about that. Something else I'd appreciate a lot if you could squeeze into the plot is a clearer explanation of Smack's feelings toward her. I know Eva is the one telling the story so she can't exactly be inside his head but unless the dubiousness of his feelings is intentional (and then don't tell me because I don't want to ruin your plot!) could you clear up in one of the upcoming chapters how he really sees her. Because sometimes he seems really tender and attentive and even caring (in his own Smack fashion we're all progressevly learning to accept and perhaps even love) but sometimes he seems like he couldn't care less so if you could develop their "relationship" a little bit more it'd be greatly appreciated. Now on a final note are we ever going to find out this story's (at least so far) great misteries: Who is Eva's father (at leats on your fictional world) and who joined her and Smack on that threesome back in Joel's house when she's blindfolded?
Well I guess this is it for now...so please update as soon as possible and congrats yet again on the intriguing, realistic and unsettling (in a good way) work!!!

THis story "Rocks" literally~!!!,

Great job it reads perfectly and it has near perfect plot and grammar.

Keep writing,

JoxBox

so good post more soo

-Emma

really interesting read.

Such an awesome story!! keep writing please.

WOW! your story is amazing! i LOVED it! hahahaha. it is sooooooo long hahaha but that is what makes it so good. good detail. i like how it is writen in actually story form other than some lame sex story that has no meaning or anything. hahahaha keep it uP!!!!!!

hey there, nice chapter! i actually really like smack again now that he's not being such a jerk and this whole thing with his brother is pretty cool! Don't you dare take a break from this story! It's too good and stopping would kill me!

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!! *spends five minutes laughing* Oh that's rich stuff. Peace and harmony. That's never going to get old.

Ahh, good stuff. Not much I can say here. Keep up the good work. I'm really enjoying it.

Peace and Blessings
-The Psycho Duck