rate_review Reviews

Dude, That really sucked for her. Having to sell yourself is awful...bummer...great job on your writing technique:)

okay so it took me a minute to realise you update two chapters. (STOP LAUGHING AT ME!!!) so well yeah, can i ask you something? is it odd to think that smack was sweet when she got home? well i thought so.

WOW!!

that was sad. does that sound weird but it was.

(points to the review in question)
i dont know what your on but this story is great, if you dont like it READ SOMETHING ELSE!!!!!

wow this was a good one kaa going and post soon
bye bye

foreshadowing! awesome! love it! cant wait to read more! stealth rocked, the aisling thing was cool, and i cant wait for it to end -- at the samr time i dread for it all to be over. lol ah well cant win all the time ttfn

OMG NO! I THOUGHT THERE WAS MORE WAITING FOR ME! BUT ITS NOT FINISHED! NOOOOOO! NOW I HAVE TO WAIT! AHHHH! so sad STUPID KARMA that was really good, damned bastards, poor "eva", im loving it, please write more

your charies (for the most part) rock, man lol

"Its the kind of place where you mop up the blood, teeth and eyesballs at closing time" and you look for the bouncer in the river the next morning. Sounds familiar, no? Reminded me of that movie I saw once on Mpix but I can't remember it's name. God, wish I did.

Anyway, good stuff! My god it's going to get worse isn't it? This is just the beginning of the trip to hell. Ah well. C'est la vie. As long as the story comes out good and she's not telling this story from a dumpster where she's hidding from her pimp and wanting her next shot of drugs, it's all okay with me. And I thought I wrote some pretty violent stuff. I hate gang bangs...

Okay, some grammatical stuff. You put ? in the middle of sentences near the top of this chapter with something that should have been a complete sentence. Something I noticed. Might want to check that out. Not much else, it's pretty well written.

Well I'm done. Talk to you later.

Peace and blessings
-The Psycho Duck

poor eva.