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I've come to the conclusion, after this, the 13th chapter, that you are very very evil. You must write in a puddle of sweat, your husband probably sniffs your chair when you're out, just to get the smell of you hammered into his brain. I admire the skills that make every conversation a real one. I admire the situation and place you have invented. I admire the raunchy scenes of unmitigated sex that have come pouring out of your brain in such a stream I am now convinced that it's not Smack fucking Eva. It's Melody fucking me. And God forgive me, it feels good.

Shit that was fuckin good!I was wondering when you were gonna update!Im glad you found time and decided to keep going itd be a waste and a shame,so take your time!Im gettin tired of Smack though,he's a fuckin asshole she needs to fuck with someone else!

O dear lord.. I had a dream about this story.. OK SMACK did the sweetest thing EVER he sang a song to Eva like durring one of their shows he told her to come up in the front of the stage and sang her this song

KC and JOJO's ALL MY LIFE

because if you listen to the lyrics its just so perfect.

OMG OMG OMG THIS STORY TOTALLY FUCKIN ROXXXXX!~!~!~!~!~! he TOTALLY likes her.. I was thinking about how he must be physically attracted to her.. or he wouldnt want her so much. mabye its just the sex but still to get it up he would have to be somewhat ok with her looks. And with the whole her choosing someone else over him thing.. like he wouldnt do the same.. he would blow her off for any other girl that had a desent rack *well at least in her mind, He might secretly be in love with her and want her and only her but is too ashamed to admit it*.. but I think that she should tell him about her worries like how he calls her slut because he doesnt want to call out the wrong name.. or how he is just using her but she is ok with that because if it means being with him than she is ok with that. I just really really LOVE this story.. I read it last night and then today I finished and I couldnt stop thinking about it all last night.. Hey when in the begining you said you would say the band name or the full name of the father well you said both.. seven day forcast and jesse.. T. something like that I dont remember the last name I know it started with a T but it is escaping my brain for the moment.. back on track .. CANT WAIT FOR THE UPDATE

Melody Fate,

Your character is beginning to piss me off. Please give her a spine.

Thank you kindly,

Birdie H.

PS:
Writer's block is as unnaturally unavoidable as growing arms, so hopefully you'll recover soon. Personally, I feel that your plot isn't suffering from your "block". Maybe it's all in your mind? Like Pavlov's dogs salivate for food, writers have the unfortunate tendency to do the same... well, maybe not drool as much, but they are taught that there are going to be points in their careers where ideas will run bone-dry and then they're fucked. I think you're doing fine.

As a realist, I appreciate the fact that you make your female character act out the emotions that an insecure teenager in a group of young adults would. As a feminist, I want to rip out your liver and sell it in the black market.

My birthday is approaching. Please have Eva fuck Vic to get back at Smack. And have her like it. A lot.

great chapter, like the others. take ur time to get over ur writers block, so then we get totally awesomely awesome chapters. ur a great writer, and always will be. keep up the great work!

-sevvy

don't worry this chapter is as good as the rest of the story!(which is so awesome by the way!!) i wonder what will happen next, i am kinda wanting this situation with smack and amy to not be over a lot can come from that. (she realizes she wants more of him, and the ass that he is will give it to her) i was kinda hoping that something would happen with vic and eva in this chapter resulting from her upset with smack and he starting to realize he feels something more for her than she thinks, but i can wait cause i just know something will. there were moments in this chapter where i was like oh this is it here he is or he's gonna come. (vic that is)lol i also think that smack can see that vic has something for eva and he himself actually has strong feelings for her as well, why stay away for days. she needs to distant herself for a bit make smack realize he needs to treat her better ( along those lines), or for some other reason. (perhaps confusion on her feelings) i can imagine a battle for her in the future. but who knows what direction you will take this, all i know is that i will love it. i loved the storm you need to put another one in there and more beach scenes.;) oh yea when is her birthday? i hope the block will be over soon, that can suck. you want so much with the story and tring to get there can be hard, but i believe you'll get it and it will be great! good luck and hoping for an update soon!

This chapter was good, but it didn't really advance the story, except to say, that maybe Smack and Eva both love each other.

I wished she didn't have sex with him this time. i was really hoping that just once even though i know they have a friendship like brother and sister, but i was hoping maybe out of loniness Eva and Vic would have had sex that night. i'm starting to dislike Smack more and more..

very very good keep going and let them talk about theire relationschip and maybey you can do something wit her and her dad
keep up the great work and post soon
bye bye