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great chapter! this is agreat story! take ur time, and write ONLY when u can find time to. its okay if it takes a while, i really enjoy this story and love how its working out. i cant wait to read/see Smack's face when he finds out Eva is going on a 'date'! HAHA! that'll be FUNNY! GREAT CHAPTER! keep up the great work,
-sevvy

You are an amazing author and you put so much love into your stories, I can tell you're not just wrting them to get off, but to entertain and tell a good story. I love Eva and her truth to sex, write on!

Well this is certainly an interesting piece of work, I never recall seeing anything quite like it. Such a serious tone, it almost brings memories of those mtv behind the music specials. Anyways, as I said before quite interesting, the formating is excelent, I can recall no spelling or gramtical errors, but there is something that is bothering me. It almost seems a bit to real, as if this is not just a fanfiction, but something that actualy happened. If this in anyway reflects you or someone you know, I give my sincere apologies for having to go through such an ordeal, no matter how it may have seemed, or how it now seems. Regardless, I believe that is everything, and if you would continue I find my self intriged by this fanfiction. This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now....

you MUST update. this story is just so engrossing adn too well crafted to not continue it as soon sa posibble. One of the best things is that you don't glamorize your characters. they are unflinchingly human- kind of ordinary, petty at times and self-centered but have some good points as well. None of your characters are two dimensional and, with so many leads, that's impressive. The way you developed your characters and their backstories is really well done and one of the highlights of the fic. I would also liek to comment on how much I like how Eva revels in her sexuality. I know- she should stand up for herself more but she enjoys sex adn doesn't try to beat around the bush about it. It's nice to read about it. Besides that, the sex is almost astonishingly hot. I mean, wow. hehehe! Can I be honest? I'm praying for a threesome between Vic, Eva adn Smack. I know, I know. It's just not Smack's personality to do it with Vic but still...a girl can dream. ::sigh:: Eva is one lucky girl.
As for a reply you did a little while back as to whom Eva ends up with: why does she have to end up with anyone? She's going through one of those life altering journey's and to be quite honest, after all she's experienced, why would she stay? It's one of those needed emotional seperations. When you've been through so much, you can't go through much more with one person, especially when you're as young as she is. She grows with the Boys, learns about Life but does that mean she has to end up with one of them? Females do not always need to finish in these stories with a boyfriend/love interest/ (in Eva's case) fuck buddy. Live, Learn and Leave.
fantastic writing. Keep it up adn update as soon as you can. (email me with an update alert if you do that type of stuff please)

Melody Fate,

I'm very glad to see that Eva is no longer minimizing herself to Smack and his dick alone; variety can be a saving grace sometimes. And what's this? Our heroine is doing things a normal 15 year old would do? It seems as if this chapter was the epitome of normalization for her since you did give us a glimpse of Eva that we normally are not able to see. Birth control, for example, has never been addressed in this story besides in the disclaimer. Bringing it into the plot along with the rather vivid image of the ear infection was a good idea and I appreciate it very much. Now the readers will know that Eva has ovaries.

Putting a little bit more of the band's history fills me with anxiety. As a woman with an obsessive oral fixation, anxiety does not look kindly upon my fingernails. Just so you know, there's nothing left to paint anymore and it's all because of the wait for the favorite character to finally reveal her identity (and to finally fuck someone else...).

Understandably, reality is a fucking bitch. If I could lock you in a room by yourself and force you to finish this, I would, but on the chance that I would be incarcerated or fined for doing so, the chances of that happening are slim. You are safe for now. As long as you continue to update, everything should be ok.

The best of luck,
Birdie H.

PS: I resent the Creed comment.

Nooo... no date... let Smack get jealous then... I like those two so much.... haha sorry just a bitter reader complaining... I still love your style in this story cause it's just so well written and not something fake or described like it would be in a fairy tale... keep up the wonderful work and I hope it's worth it. I look forward to upcomming chapters!

aww now that was cute

i know i say this a lot but i really do mean it, i love it and this chapter was so great! i like the sound of paul entering into the story... i love it!!! can't wait to read what happens next... paul, smack, vic and eva what fun is comming. update soon! :)

You know, you really have a way with words. You're able to write so eloquently and yet so bluntly. And its really a great mix for the genre of story this is. I love the humour you insert in. It always comes in just the right amount at the right times. I cant wait for the next chapters. Keep up the suberb work.

okat, this is a review for chapter nine adn i have to say that...i got teary eyed. i honestly did. it's 2 am adn i'm still reading b/c i want to see what happens. i absolutely love this. the characters are so involving, created so well and are so rounded, it's beyond impressive. it's almost a miracle. you know a aff.net fic trancends the ordinary when a reader skips the smut to read what's happening to the characters beyond the sex. this is just a fantastic fic. wonderful work.