rate_review Reviews

I like your second chapter,
blame is a powerful weapon
regardless of who holds it.

o_o You write cool poetry...better than mine. xD I really love the way you did it though...like with the four lines and each a certain length...it really gave the peice a sort of rhythm. It almost felt like a sort of chant in my head...listening to it go through...it really was cool though. Not only did it flow and keep a beat, but it made sense...yay! You definitely blew the teen-anst poets out of the water with this one. ^_^ I like. More?

-Moonstar

Well, well...we have a poet in our midst. ^_~ I like this. It flows neatly, tells a truthful story...and moves with a good, understandable pace from one stanza to the next. Everything a well put together piece should do. In all honesty, I prefer this one little figment of your work to that neverending scroll of story you're putting together, but that's just
me. -shrug- Maybe it's because in this...you don't have an oppertunity to put in too much detail...or rush or confuse...and repetive sentence structure is a good thing. ;D Oh, do forgive me...I'm afraid it's just far to much fun. Couldn't stop by without saying something to the negative, could I? Ruin my reputation for one thing... Aside from that though, I truly enjoyed it. A true "diamond in the rough" if you will. (The emo teenage heartbreak notebook that usually dominates the poetry section being the 'rough' in that analogy...;_;).

I'm wondering if you've got more of that talent hiding somewhere? Or are you just teasing me so I'll cry next chapter when you repeat old mistakes and post your own downfall? (Alright...so it'd take more than a sloppy piece of work to make me cry...but that flop of disappointment sure isn't pleasant.) I suppose I'll wait to find out.

Eternity:out

God dammit! I need to get an account on this ridiculous site so I can fix my comments. Do you know how annoying it is to look at all your errors and not have even a bit of power to go back and correct them? It's like drawing in pen; everything's perfect until one eye turns out bigger than the other...and then you have to live with your mistake for eternity. I suppose it's kinda like life too...in general. For the record, life sucks.

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