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January 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok that was good but i wish it was longer.more please
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January 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
thank you so writing more.wow that was fast and looking for more it was good.
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January 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh no please don't stop there.i like it so far more please
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ok well I'll say that it has potential but you need to work on gramer. try re-reading it and revise it because there are things in this chapter that don't make sense if you read it you also need to work on punctuation.
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
chap 2
ok well to start the critisizem same as what I said for chap 1
ok well to start the critisizem same as what I said for chap 1
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I won't lie it has potential but same as in the first 2 reviews you need to work on gramer and punctuation along w/ sentence structure. remember to re-read, revise and work on grammor cause at the moment I would rate the fic as a 2
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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like it. the discription is good amd i like the way it dose the flashbacks.