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I've been reading this story for months! I can't believe it ended like that!! :( It was so sad I almost cried. English is not my first language either, but I tried my best to understand whatyou wrote. Errors or no errors, it was beautiful. Thank you.

That's just utterly depressing. I'm feeling quite sad right now that Elias is dead and that he suffered so badly before he died, I guess it's good that he had Alex but somehow that doesn't feel like enough when compared to what he went through. But I guess a little bit of comfort is better than nothing. I should know that. My life at this point in time is pretty crappy but little things do help. Of course the situations don't compare, but I think that when your suffering it helps you to appreciate small things, little acts of kindness, all the more and so you feel them more strongly. If life is good and someone helps you up when you fall, it doesn't mean as much as if life has been really beating you down and someone offers you a hand. I dunno, I'm just rambling now trying to make myself feel better. I shouldn't have read this now, I'm going to have a bad day tomorrow and I should have held off until after it was over. *Sigh* Oh well. I can use my imagination and make up a happy ending myself.

"And just when they were about to be caught the Justice League appeared and Superman blew all the bad men into space and brought Elias and Alex to the Fortress of Solitude where they lived out their lives in peace and happiness. Actually first Elias' fairygodmother brought his brother and sister and his friend Emma. Oh and Superman ran around the world backwards bunches of times to turn back time and brought back Elias' mother and father. And NOW they lived out their lives in peace and happiness. The End."

Yes that's much better, I like that ending better:D

Anyways being serious, it was sad but it fit and it worked. I don't think you need me to point out the grammar problems, but I do want to say that I think you do amazingly well with a language that's not your first. You do better with it than some people who do speak english as a first language.

I didn't see any chance of a happy ending either.

But you did a superb job with the chapter - it made me cry...

wow...i think it was best if he died, though i would've liked to see elias and alexander happy together. it's your story though! maybe if we experienced elias' death from the boy's perspective, it would've added more emotion/feeling to this scene, but it's still good as it is. great writing. i can't wait to see what happens next.

Yay it's done!!! Congrats! I actually thought it was going to end with the other ch and then I went back and reread the A/N. Not that this ending was any more uplifting it was just a bittersweet end. I am glad E.L felt that he had some sort of resolution he deserved it more than anyone even Alex. I felt like Alex was also a victim but I thought that where E.L was brave Alex should have been the one to step up to the plate. I could also tell that it probably came out faster than you wanted because there was a lot of grammatical errors. I am glad you are going to write a slash sequel of course if there is any hint that the war is still on I am not reading it. I don't think my heart can take it. I'll stick to Jesse and Joni! They are hot and fluffy! Oh you might also want to add to the warnings "major character death" just so others know what to expect incase it isn't their cup of tea.

Okay so I finally stopped balling my eyes now and my nose is still stuffed and my tears just won't stop. I hope you are happy you killed a poor little boy you evil little writer. I knew this was going to happen that's why I didn't read the other story now I'm thinking that one might actually be less depressing. Ugh!!!!!!! The death scene was all so dramatic with the bathing and blessing like a final right and the way Alex was the last thing he saw was all very well written and had a lot of emotion.I'm not sure if the story is almost over but it seems hard to do much with it after the main character dies. I liked the story but I am pretty sure that this is one that I will never go back and read again. It's kind of like going to the dentist to have a teeth pulled it is necessary so you voluntarily go but it is so painful that you never repeat just for fun. I think you did such a great job of making the whole thing realistic and I agree with you the rape scene at the end didn't need to be described in detail it would have detracted from the mood of the scene. I think the almost silent quality of the scene added at least for me to the drunken distorted brutality of what the soldiers were doing. In case this is my last review, Congrats on a great well told story.

I can’t say I didn’t find Elias’ ending quite abrupt, but it’s a sad end to a sad story, I never expected it to end with a happy ever after. So, don’t feel bad about this chapter, it’s good. I’m actually surprised you didn’t end your story here. I wonder how Alexander takes his lover’s death. Not well I guess.

that just made me weep. you really know how to break your readers' hearts. but i agree- i can't see it having ended any other way. i can't wait to find out what was written in the letter. this story has been so devastating and your writing is incredible.

Awwww, I was hoping you'd be able to find a way for this to have a happy ending. But yea, I wasn't really seeing how it could end positively. I think I said so before. It was fitting though that he got to take out one of the bastards before he died. And I guess he'll be in a better place. Okay I'm going to go off somewhere to cry now, thanks:'(

dude that has to be the saddest fucking ending i have EVER encountered. i seriously admire your courage to write that piece...