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January 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this story is kind of repative... but good none the less i suppose
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December 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good story! I really liked your style of writing and the storyline.
Suggestion? Could you put a blank line between your paragraphs? Then it's much easier to read. Also, always repeating the last line when you change POVs is kind of redundant.
Keep up the good work!
Suggestion? Could you put a blank line between your paragraphs? Then it's much easier to read. Also, always repeating the last line when you change POVs is kind of redundant.
Keep up the good work!
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December 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the is great!!!! can't wait too read more!!!
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December 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
its quite good but i would have liked him to make her use the shower head to make herself cum or something like that so she found a release as well.
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December 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved this you should be my sex councoler. I ABSOLUTLY LOVED IT!!! I am not kidding YOu should write stories like this full time...By the way... you inspired me to have my man do that for me...both of them...And just keep on writting this It's good shit...Loved it keep it going!
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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was a real turn on...and the shower is one of the best places to choose. Nice.
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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good writing style. Almost poetic, but at the same time very sensual. Good job.
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December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OHH YEA BABY!!!! this story is soooo freakin awesome!!! KEEP UP THE FANTASTIC WORK!!!