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December 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant...excellent writing.
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
One of the better ones but then I am partial to the stories when the main character of focus looks inwards allowing the reader the hidden insights of their soul.
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November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I know you didn't get alot of review on this one or your Tagretta story but no big deal ya know? Ok, personally I really liked this one because I am a big fan of mob stuff like the Godfather and Goodfella's, so this story was alot like this. It portrayed a really intimate and descriptive hit and the inner turmoil that Martello seems to be going through in his head.
I think it may have helped the readers more if you would have given some more background on what he is thinking or who some of these people are (His fiancee, his brother, etc.) Like why did they die or were whacked? Who is Albericci and why is he a turncoat? Stuff like that. I think if you would have either given more background and plot OR just eliminated what you had and focused more on JUST the hit he was doing it would have flowed overall alot better. But I am not complaining! I really love your Canziano stories the best of all that you write, because they are so dark and descriptive and graphically violent. (Yeah, I'm a freak, so what...You just write the violence really well, I don't know how else to describe it.) It's brutal and graphic and raw but yet not overwhelming. Anyway keep on writing those Canziano stories and put some more of those hilarious disclaimers.
I think it may have helped the readers more if you would have given some more background on what he is thinking or who some of these people are (His fiancee, his brother, etc.) Like why did they die or were whacked? Who is Albericci and why is he a turncoat? Stuff like that. I think if you would have either given more background and plot OR just eliminated what you had and focused more on JUST the hit he was doing it would have flowed overall alot better. But I am not complaining! I really love your Canziano stories the best of all that you write, because they are so dark and descriptive and graphically violent. (Yeah, I'm a freak, so what...You just write the violence really well, I don't know how else to describe it.) It's brutal and graphic and raw but yet not overwhelming. Anyway keep on writing those Canziano stories and put some more of those hilarious disclaimers.
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very cruel and graphic description of a hit on this one. When you read it along with your other Canzano Family stories it gives a really good insight into what makes this guy tick, you know? You ever think of getting yourself published,